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Can someone please help me with my spelling - July 15th 2018, 10:22 AM

I need to add this as my job to my CV but having a learning disability makes it really hard I tried my best but could someone help me re word it and read it through for me please!

I would really appreciate it!

I worked at Service Central as a Business Development Manager. In this role I was responsible for managing current account but all expanding the Client list through New Business development. The categories I covered were, Merchant Services, Energy, and Telecommunications. The Core of my role however was the Telecommunications division.
In this role I regularly achieved targets in a very competitive B2B environment. This was a achieved through effective planning and the building of strong relationships with decision makers. I feel the role demonstrates my ability to deliver under pressure and also effectively plan strategies which lead to a successful outcome.

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Re: Can someone please help me with my spelling - July 15th 2018, 02:35 PM

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I worked at Service Central as a Business Development Manager. In this role I was responsible for managing current account but all expanding the Client list through New Business development. The categories I covered were, Merchant Services, Energy, and Telecommunications. The Core of my role however was the Telecommunications division.
In this role I regularly achieved targets in a very competitive B2B environment. This was a achieved through effective planning and the building of strong relationships with decision makers. I feel the role demonstrates my ability to deliver under pressure and also effectively plan strategies which lead to a successful outcome.

I think this looks relatively good. The only thing I am struggling with is where you put 'but'. I am not understanding what you are trying to say. I don't know if this was an intended use of the word but it's hard for me to understand what you are trying to say. Other than that the wording seems pretty good to me. It's easy to understand and helps convey what you learned/did at the job.


If you need help with formatting let me know, as well.


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Re: Can someone please help me with my spelling - July 15th 2018, 09:20 PM

You have some issues with punctuation and capitalizing first letter of words that are not a proper noun. I know that in the German language, most nouns are given the same treatment as proper nouns in English; so, unless you've translated from German, there's absolutely no need for that.

I also agree with Jenna that "but" doesn't flow or make sense with the rest of the sentence.

Other than those small errors, it looks good.
   
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Re: Can someone please help me with my spelling - August 14th 2018, 09:45 AM

Hey. You can surf the Internet a lot of sites that offer professional help in writing. So don't delay and go online.
   
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