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Introduction paragraph? - January 20th 2011, 01:34 AM

I'm trying to write my introduction paragraph of my persuasive paper and I can't think of a way to word it, so it makes sense. The topic of my paper is are beauty contests for children harmful? My 3 main points are appearce, health problems, and teaches kids the wrong values. My conclusion sentence is beauty contests are harmful to children. How can I word it so its good and makes sense?
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Re: Introduction paragraph? - January 20th 2011, 01:56 AM

You can do this
First, I would reccomend gathering background information on your particular topic. Research beauty contests for children, and take notes. Then, write out an outline so that you may complete your essay in a lesser time than you would writing it out.
Remember, you have to establish your main arguement and gather evidence that supports your stand.
This is how your outline should be:
1. HOOK (Captures your reader's attention. Can be anything from a story to a quotation.)
3. THESIS STATEMENT (Structure your three main points: appearance, health issues, and moral values into a strong sentence so that your reader knows what to expect in your essay. Obviously this is super important because it's the central part.)

For body paragraphs, do three to emphasize each point.

Body P #1

2. CONCRETE DETAIL #1 (With transition)
3. COMMENTARY #1 (Supporting evidence)
4. COMMENTARY #2 (" ")
5. CONCRETE DETAIL #2 (With transition)
6. COMMENTARY #1 (Supporting evidence)
7. COMMENTARY #2 (" ")
8. CONCLUDING SENTENCE ( Transition to next paragraph)

Likewise, do the same for the other two paragraphs.

For conclusion, you just restate your main arguement and how you ultimately proved it. For the last sentence, you might want to restate your hook so that it echos.

Hope this helps I have to give credit to my 8th grade english teacher for this

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Re: Introduction paragraph? - January 20th 2011, 05:18 AM

I'm assuming you're in high-school since university level papers need a lot more research done on the topic and you don't use just an intro paragraph, 2-3 body paragraphs and a conclusion. Perhaps in english courses you do but I took only 1 so I cant say too much there.

Anyway, before you write it, do research. I often find it easier to not to the intro right away but start on building my arguments. Once I have, then I make the introduction paragraph. I've found it useful to sometimes include some historical references in the introduction because that part of the paper is meant to be broad as well as foreshadowing what will come. For example, when I did one of my papers on the neurochemical effects of schizophrenia and its anti-psychotics (ended up at least 10+ pages), in the introduction I mentioned when it was first introduced as a recognized mental disorder and what its previous names were. A historical reference is usually in the first sentence when the paper is a long one. The next few sentences give more of this as well as stating the thesis sentence.

So, something you could do is research when the very first child beauty pagent was then contrast that from how it is in modern times. Even though this comparison isn't your topic, it show the reader a) you know a fair bit about the topic and b) it's interesting while being related. Don't focus too much on the historical aspect otherwise it gets confusing what your paper is about. Doing this can avoid you having to write "this paper is on...." and that alone isn't what teachers, TAs and professors like reading.

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Re: Introduction paragraph? - January 22nd 2011, 09:28 PM

Quotes, definitions or statistics are a must!!

For example, you could define 'harmful' (from the dictionary) and say how beauty contests are harmful (your three main points).

Erm... statistics on beauty contents - e.g. how many there are each year or in your area; how many apply for them; what ages etc

Hope this helps =]
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