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a secret you can keep
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May 29th 2012, 08:08 PM
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make it stop
these memories make it stop this life please, make it stop or ill have to take a knife make it stop the pain make it stop these tears please, make it stop or i may give into your fears make it stop my suffering make it stop my blood please, make it stop or soon there'll be a flood make it stop my mistakes make it stop this hate please, make it stop or suicide will be my fate formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss  |
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 Doing "Rob" stuff.
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June 1st 2012, 02:55 AM
The repetition gives this A LOT of meaning, and gives it a nice flow. I would recommend getting a thesaurus next time, and finding some other alternative words though. A lot of the words are quite simple, and the simplicity is nice, but it'd be nice if there was a bit more variety in vocabulary. Overall, it's very nice, and very applicable to many people suffering from a variety of different issues. Great job!
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a secret you can keep
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 2nd 2012, 11:14 PM
thank you Traci
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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Naga's Minion
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 3rd 2012, 02:24 AM
I love this a lot. I love the repetition and the beat it has when you read it outloud
 very well written!
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a secret you can keep
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Name: Samuel
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 3rd 2012, 02:49 AM
thank you Tay
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 3rd 2012, 04:12 AM
Dude I love this, and I love you. Hang in there, for me?
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a secret you can keep
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 3rd 2012, 09:11 PM
i love you too Rach. and i will. i kinda have to
thanks luv
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 3rd 2012, 09:14 PM
Quote:
stay strong <3
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June 3rd 2012, 09:35 PM
thanks. ill try
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 4th 2012, 02:53 AM
you're welcome. If you ever feel down, I'm here for you
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 5th 2012, 07:56 PM
thank you
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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Silently falling.
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 5th 2012, 11:37 PM
Wow, I really love this, it is a powerful poem and the repetition does add a lot of emotion to it.
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Re: please, make it stop -
June 6th 2012, 09:34 PM
thank you Dez
formerly snowstorm Repose en Paix, Grandad/mom H., Sito, Nay, Mary, Aunt S., Peter, Katie, Lexi, Mrs. Radoye, Mandii, Trevor, Megan, Uncle T., Erika, Aunt R. ♥ The world will bleed its bloody tale. People will throw their stones. But the one thing you must always remember is: You no longer walk alone Blake Bliss |
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