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Inside a dream - November 23rd 2011, 01:20 AM

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-Inside a dream.

You've built up four walls
Then painted them white
Locked yourself in
&Filled it with hope

Imagination with no limits
Your mind takes the lead
Building creations of your own
A fantasy you've commenced

You call the shots
Its your game now
It won't last forever
So seize what you've got

Invincible, Unbreakable
You start to awake
This dream you've dreamt up
Wasn't meant for keeps.
   
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Re: Inside a dream - November 23rd 2011, 07:44 AM

You have definantly got something going there! Good job!!! Keep writing you can word your thoughts very nicely I like
   
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