Triggering (Abuse): Daughter

[Autumnwind]

Hello TH nation. This is probably my most disturbed piece I've ever written. You might have thought my other pieces were disturbing, but this one takes the cake. I really don't want to give the story I'm trying to portray away just yet. But if you have a faint heart, please, do not read. If you have been in an abusive relationship, please, do not read. This poem can get very disturbing.

Now. Most of you know I'm making a Hip-hop album, Called "Road Block" Last night I thought of a song I would make. I called it "My Daughter" at first, just for perspective. But, let me assure you I do not have a daughter. This will be number 6 or 7 on my Album "Road Block" and if you don't know what album I'm talking about. click on my link in my signature.

I'd really like a lot of opinions on this one, as I really felt great about this piece. It's one of my favorites, I have to say. Please, lots of criticism.
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You're daddy's little girl, daddys whole entire world

Put on that dress, stand in front of him and give it a twirl

wipe them bubbles off your face and picture the undisturbed

Throw that mirror to the curb, a mixture of who you are and who you were

Daddy tells the teacher all them colors on your face

Are from the lines that you trace when you cover for grace

With your powder but you know it's from the way he escapes

When is mother gonna save? You start wonder in your brain

The angel wont come to stay, but you still get down to pray

Hoping mommy comes down from heaven and takes the suffer away

But when daddy peeks in your room, noticing now you're awake

You scramble under the covers with tears rolling down your face

He climbs in bed slowly, whispers "you're going to be okay"

But you know this game, the one he knows you'll play

'Cause if you don't, you can say goodbye to your glowing faith

'Cause he knows that angel in your cross can't close the drapes

You loath every day hoping the sun just goes away

So you can hide in the dark hoping daddy doesn't disgrace

Corrupted embrace served with disgust and distaste

Try to abruptedly erase the sick, fucked up play-dates

The fire burns in your heart for every single fiber hurt

Your whole life withered down to survive the worst

Strive for rebirth but it's hard when he finds that pink skirt

Trying to reverse the scratches on your mind he cursed

[Autumnwind]

By the way, If you are in any way in this sort of relationship or know someone who is. PLease, tell someone. You wont hurt anyone by telling someone, you can possibly and probably will save a life.

Do not be afraid, if you tell someone, you will not get in trouble. By the person doing that, or by the people trying to help.

Please, get help. It's never okay to let things go, especially like this. We can all get through this with support.

I'm sorry of this offended anyone, but I'm still going to continue writing / record this piece.

[katpanda]

This poem is well written.
The content is very heavy. As already said, I suggest speaking out if this the case for you or someone you know.

[Autumnwind]

Originally Posted by katpanda

This poem is well written.
The content is very heavy. As already said, I suggest speaking out if this the case for you or someone you know.

Thank you so much for your compliment.

And yes, the content is very heavy. It's why I put warning stickers on it. I don't want people to get offended or anything.

I'm probably going to record this one after I record "Late" as I already have the beat, and it is...perfect for the content I'm writing. It's going to be a great song, I can tell.

[katpanda]

My pleasure.
yeah, its a very touchy subject but it definitely sends a message.

[ThornedRose]

WOW......this is awesome! you should join writerscafe.org its an awesome site for poetry!

[Dez]

This is so amazing. Everything that I have read by you has been, though! Like what was already said, this is really heavy but also so well-written.

[Autumnwind]

Thank you for all the compliments

I'm not sure if y'all know how much it means to be. I really thank you, a lot

[GoneBeyondRepair]

this is superly greatly amayzingly good Rob!
great job!

[_sunsets64.]

not gonna lie, i almost started crying while reading this! you are an incredible writer, this is everything that a good piece should be--it draws emotion, it makes the reader think, it flows nicely, and it's impactive and memorable. great job!

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Most definitely one of my favorite pieces you've written. Seriously, this is fantastic.