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Alive - December 25th 2011, 01:34 AM

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Just let me die how I wanna
Let me leave how I arrived
Let me close my eyes to the dark
And wake up to the light
Let me show you how it really feels
To be someone like me
In this society today,
I could never really be free
I got a six foot USB cord
And I know what to do with it
I got a bottle of pills on the counter
And I know I can take them
Let me leave how I arrived
I promise I'll do it quietly
I promise I won't struggle
If you'd just pull the rope a little tighter
I'd be ever so grateful
This is truly my last goodbye
I don't want to see you cry
Wrap your arms around me one last time
If you really must...
I'm not doing this to hurt you...
I swear upon my life,
and though I'm taking it tonight,
I promise that I love you..
Let me leave how I arrived.
Alive.


   
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Skittles Minion.

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Re: Alive - December 30th 2011, 04:32 PM

Sorry it took me so long to get back to you on this. But, I absolutely loved it. It kinda gave me chills. I've definitely been in that place before and this piece definitely brought up thoughts of that, which is a good thing. It was very raw and I could tell you weren't trying to be fancy -- you were just writing what you feel. That's awesome! Keep writing and keep letting me know when you have new work up! You're great!






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Re: Alive - December 30th 2011, 06:54 PM

This is poem is very relateable. I definately know what that feels like.


"Shoot for the moon, even if you miss you'll land among the stars."

"For those who don't care, for those who can't see, never give up, always thrive to be free."

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Blessed Be!
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Re: Alive - December 31st 2011, 02:11 PM

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Let me leave how I arrived.
Alive.
Wow! This part gave me chills. What a powerful way to end a poem!

The emotion here, as Sammi said, was very raw. Your writing style is one that makes the reader feel, which is the goal of any good piece of writing.

Keep expressing! Writing is a great way to get these feelings off your chest.
   
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