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Question Need title suggestions - February 10th 2012, 10:53 PM

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This is a free verse poem so no rhyming sorry
decided to try out a new type of style since I always do rhyming.
If it sucks sorry Thanks for reading. if you have any title suggestions I'll be glad to hear

Desperate..
She's fighting, pushing, struggling,
trying to cling to anything she can
get her grasp on..

At war with her own self...
Stuffing her face barley able to
enjoy what she so longed for. Only
gaining more guilt, more shame

Sticking her fingers down her throat,
trying to get rid of the feeling,
emotions, fears, problems.. Only
gaining more..

She slowly slumps down,.. back
moping the dust off the wall, hands
over her face clutching her hair with
tears flowing from her eyes like an
endless river. She picks up the silver
object glistening in the bathroom
light laying beside her.
She follows it with her eyes, taking
her breath away. Slowly etching the
cold metal in her wrist sending chills
up her spine. She can finally feel
something. Pressing in deeper and
deeper.

Perhaps the pain will leak out.
Drop after drop after drop.
She leans her head against the wall
hoping yet knowing the moment
won't last forever.
She stands up clutching the door
knob, knees wobbling and meets with
some stranger, far skinner than
what she sees, far prettier than she
thinks, and far more hurt than she
knows. Smashing the reflection with
her fist. Hoping to be no more but it
remains staring back.

She opens the door struggling to
move her feet one over the other.
Hobbling down the hall,..hands
following the wall ready to grasp if
she falls. Finally collapsing on her
bed welcomed with a stale smell
and memories.

Another day...

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Re: Need title suggestions - February 11th 2012, 07:10 AM

The only problem "I" find with Free Verse poetry, is that it almost sounds like someone is just talking - or having a conversation.

Although, this one didn't. You changed my perspective a bit on Free Verse poetry. Although I know it's poetry, I always question how much poetry is it? I guess I'm just Naive like that.

BUT, this was great. A great read

Edit: OH I didn't even see the title suggestion thing. Hmmm...gah I'm terrible with titles -.- lol. I'll think, though.

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Re: Need title suggestions - February 11th 2012, 07:50 AM

Thanks I'm glad you found it enjoyable to read however, I still need a title.
   
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