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Name: Dez
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Re: Please give me constructive criticism on this poem! -
March 1st 2013, 10:27 AM
I like it a lot! The first sentence drew me in and made me want to continue reading. There is a lot of emotion and power in this, and you used a lot of great wording. Good job! 
Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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