What do you think of my poem?
 

Hey guys,
I'm fairly new here. I love to write and this is one of my newest poems. Tell me what you think. It's called "Broken Beyond Repair"

I cannot let go of the past.
I'm always contemplating which day should be my last.
Life is a beautiful lie, death is the ugly truth.
It's all about fighting the battles of your youth.

I wish I was someone other than me.
I'm fighting to make the mirror happy.
The weight I lose is never enough.
This is life, It's time to get tough.

While I'm starving to be thin,
I cut to release the pain from within.
As I watch my pain bleed out,
I am silent, but I want to shout.

Anxiety makes me unable to breathe.
Screw this life, I want to leave.
Anxiety keeps me up all night.
I don't have much more of a fight.

I hide my depression with a smile.
As life flashes before me, I'm in denial.
Everything looks so bleak.
I am tired, and so weak.

I'm tired of living in this hell.
I wish this was my last farewell.
I live my life in constant doubt.
Suicide seems like the only way out.

I lost the battle, not the war.
Someday, recovery will come knocking at my door.

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I think it's great! You're a really talented writer.

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This is amazing! You're really talented, i'd love to read more poems.
The part that stood out the most to me is, "It's all about fighting battles with your youth" That brought back memories. Keep writing.

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I love it. I love to write, too. I wrote a poem book (Called Schizophrenic) and put it on Figment. If you don't know what figment is, know what it is cause it's awesome!

Anyway, I know writing always helps me..
You're talented, grasshopper. :3

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i love it! ur great @ writing poems ;)

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I love it! Keep it UP!

Jay.