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Breathe~me January 14th 2013 01:27 PM

Poem/story ?
 
So I haven't wrote a poem or a story for a while, so I decided i wanted to try and write something to get my mind of the thoughts that are associated with this poem/story. Sorry that the rhyming isn't too good, I found it hard to allow it to follow a story line and rhyme.

Eyes swept by fears
Her Face; Dominated by tears
Her body;trapped within a cage
The figures around her;full of rage
Their attitudes;gruesome and violent
While she lay on the cold ground; Remaining Painfully silent
They Laugh and grin
Faces full of the devil's sin
Deathly smiles; a new definition of vile
She is then hit and beat
as she falls to her feet
Crying tears
Releasing fears
As she dreams to die
Hanging unconscious from a ceiling so high
A beautiful noose
All she did in the end was lose
The game of life
Stabbed in the heart with an emotional knife
A face so fragile,cold and pale
Her last attempt at life; a fail
Emotionless eyes
'I'm fine'; one of her tragic lies
A fragile corpse hanging from a rope
Evidence that she's lost all hope

¯|_(ツ)_|¯ January 14th 2013 01:42 PM

Re: Poem/story ?
 
Wow, this is beautiful and powerful, especially the last few lines! Amazing job!

:)em January 15th 2013 06:42 PM

Re: Poem/story ?
 
Amaze-balls!!! The ryming is great, I love the whole thing!

oldaccount January 15th 2013 09:57 PM

Re: Poem/story ?
 
I like it! It's great :) keep writing! Stay strong <3


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