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Not_here

June 6th 2015 08:42 PM

meh poem "desert"

I'm a stranger in a strange land
Trudging through hills of sand
My stomach swallows my chest
My hands quaver in protest, as
My legs beg to rest
But the sand does not end

I bite my lips knowing the truth
I must face the desert and pretend
that the wind does not pelt punches every which way I turn
and every which way I go that the sun does not burn
So I wrap my self in my arms
So I catch the last drop of water
So I hum my favorite tune,
and trudge through
Again and again

edit: formatting issues fixed on its own *) no complaint there. So I just took out that begining complaint about my formatting issues.

Ennui.

June 6th 2015 09:33 PM

Re: meh poem "desert"

This is not meh at all. D: I like it!

hocus pocus

June 9th 2015 03:27 AM

Re: meh poem "desert"

This is awesome! I really like the topic you compared your feelings to. :)

Not_here

June 9th 2015 03:44 AM

Re: meh poem "desert"

thank you both <3

Kintsukuroi.

June 11th 2015 02:33 AM

Re: meh poem "desert"

You did a really good job on this and it isn't "meh" in the slightest. D: I really liked this part:

Quote:

I bite my lips knowing the truth
I must face the desert and pretend
that the wind does not pelt punches every which way I turn
and every which way I go that the sun does not burn

Not_here

June 13th 2015 01:37 PM

Re: meh poem "desert"

thank you Lexi

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