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WhisperingSilence May 27th 2017 12:37 AM
The place that love forgot
 
It was never a home
More of a hell hole
Love and hate combined
It was a house
Held together with bricks and mortar
Love was forgot
Replaced by bruises
Wayward outlandish excuses
Lies and dishonesty riddled their lives
It was a place love forgot
Taught not talk bad of the secrets within
It was never a home
Just a shelter and a place to sleep
Held together with bricks and mortar
In their beds they silently would weep
While mum and dad drank the poisionois drinks
Love never lived
Only hate survived
It was a place love forgot

hocus pocus May 27th 2017 01:52 PM
Re: The place that love forgot
 
I like how you used repetition. Thanks for sharing. :hug:

Everglow. May 27th 2017 08:43 PM
Re: The place that love forgot
 
I love the repetition in this throughout the poem, it made it really powerful and I think reinforced the atmosphere that this piece of writing had within it. Keep writing! I've seen a few of your poems here and they're always very good. :)

NeuroBeautiful May 28th 2017 04:08 AM
Re: The place that love forgot
 
I really liked this one. Thank you for sharing. I love reading your work.

Ennui. May 28th 2017 06:22 PM
Re: The place that love forgot
 
I agree with liking the repetition, as well as the emotion!

.Brittany. May 29th 2017 11:59 PM
Re: The place that love forgot
 
Thank you for sharing this with us. It's very well written.


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