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Agony June 7th 2012 05:54 AM

Poem: my dear friend tina
 
My dear friend Tina, what have I done?
I've made another mistake, while you've made none
Without your guidance I am lost
Deserting our friendship comes with a great cost
I left you for doom
When you were in your darkest gloom
I won't forgive for what I've done
I've made another mistake, while you've made none

I thought of you today
When I looked down from my window, where the ground lay
Thought of all the times you wanted to fall
All those times I answered your call
But now here I sit alone
And glance at my non-ringing phone
I've thought about what you and me had done
I've made another mistake, while you've made none

I float in this world, stuck in the inbetween
I ponder over the memories of what I've seen
I remember you at your prime
If only I could re-live that one time
But now all i remember is our last fight
Sitting here in the dark lonely night
Thinking about what I could have done
I've made another mistake, while you've made none

You won't listen to my apology
I do not blame you for not listening to me
You wouldn't care if I died right now
And today I make one last vow
I wont turn my back on a friend
And if I shall then hell I will descend
I won't forget the evil I have done
I've made my final mistake, while you've made none

Tell me what you think, also read my other poem called: Tina's letter. Tina these poems go out to you, I miss you my old friend, and I am sorry.

Everglow. June 7th 2012 03:11 PM

Re: Poem: my dear friend tina
 
This is a really good poem, I like the emotion in it. I can really feel words that you wrote like you meant every one of them. I'm sorry for whatever happened. If you need anyone feel free to message me.

Agony June 8th 2012 02:15 AM

Re: Poem: my dear friend tina
 
Thank you, I really did mean it...it's been a tough time dealing with the mistakes I have made :(

EmilyHope June 9th 2012 07:17 AM

Re: Poem: my dear friend tina
 
wow, you are a very good writer! I love the emotion! I can feel exactly (or close) to what you mean just by your words. I very much admire your style of writing. If you would ever like to talk feel free to PM me. I am new here but Ive posted 4 or so of my own poems. hope to talk to ou soon!

Agony June 9th 2012 10:56 PM

Re: Poem: my dear friend tina
 
Thanks, I do my best.

Le Papillon June 10th 2012 11:06 PM

Re: Poem: my dear friend tina
 
i love the emotion in this, and the repitition really helps that along. very well written. :hug: feel free to PM me if you need anything


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