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48thTree99 March 30th 2018 11:51 AM

Another random poem...
 
A random poem I just wrote right then... (It may not be very good...)

When others smile, in pain I cry out.
When they may drink, I witness drought.
While others have beds, I sleep on dirt.
And when they heal, I still hurt.

This life is so cruel - why does it have to be me?
I finally find a decent home and then I have to flee.
Of the frequent sound of gunfire, I live in fear.
And it is very rare when, of bullets, the sky is clear.

Diseases here are inevitable - that, I know,
And it’s really hard to travel quickly when we really have to go.
Death will come very soon, I’m sure,
I knew that long before, from a bullet, my flesh tore.

Maybe that is better for me, an end to my life,
I’d much rather that than be sold off as a wife.
Nobody will care about me in ten years - I’m just a little refugee girl,
Wealthy people will keep living, oblivious to the rest of the world.

Feedback please?

Svisttt March 31st 2018 07:50 AM

Re: Another random poem...
 
Hey! This was really good and had a powerful message, thank you for sharing! Personally, I really liked the first stanza, but all of it was great!

DeletedAccount69 April 1st 2018 03:27 PM

Re: Another random poem...
 
I thought this was powerful! Thank you for sharing. :)

Ennui. April 1st 2018 10:38 PM

Re: Another random poem...
 
I like the flow and the rhyming. :)

Arabesque- golfing girl. April 13th 2018 02:39 PM

Re: Another random poem...
 
I liked all of this. Great job. Hugs


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