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Poem I made a while back.
The Spider There’s a spider on my ceiling. Every night when I’m trying to rest, I see it crawling on my ceiling. It’s such a disgusting thing. I never thought I’d have SPIDERS in my room! It walks across the ceiling, creeping me out. I don’t want to look at it, but now it’s there, I just can’t stop thinking about it. I try to lay my head on my pillow and have a sweet dream. But even though I’m trying to think of nice things, in the back of my head, all I can think is... That damn spider. I just can’t ignore it anymore, it scares me too much, with its creepy-crawly legs. I take a book and I squash it. It’s so relieving. It won’t crawl and scare me anymore. But as soon as I take the book away and look at the squashed remains of the bug, I feel...guilty. Look what I’ve done! Nobody will love me if they know there’s dead spiders in my room! I bury my head into my pillow, crying. I try to forgive myself after a while. I sit back up, and I assure myself I won’t hurt them any more. I blink. There’s more spiders on my ceiling. |
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This is such an amazing piece. :)
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A masterpiece
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I like how you formatted this- it looks like a spider!
This was well written and I can relate to the feelings portrayed in your writing! |
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The lines look like two inverted spades put together for me. :nosweat:
But seriously, great job with this! I hope you share more of your work with us soon. :) |
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This was lovely and I enjoyed reading it:) Thank you so much for sharing this with us:)
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I really like your writing style here, especially how it ended!
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That was an incredible read, and so humane towards spiders. Me? I can't stand them, but all the same that was a beautifully written poem and I thank you! :)
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This is a really creatively written poem. First of all I love the way it looks visually like a spider. I can't help but really like visual poetry and that was a really clever format to use. I also really liked the poem itself and I feel like every single one of us has been in the position where we're scared of a spider but feel somewhat guilty for killing it :nosweat: I like that it hints at something deeper though. I hope you'll post more of your writing here! thank you for sharing :)
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