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Post Poem I made a while back. - December 27th 2020, 09:21 PM

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The Spider


Thereís a spider on my ceiling.
Every night when Iím trying to rest, I see it crawling on my ceiling.
Itís such a disgusting thing.
I never thought Iíd have SPIDERS in my room!
It walks across the ceiling, creeping me out.
I donít want to look at it, but now itís there, I just canít stop thinking about it.
I try to lay my head on my pillow and have a sweet dream.
But even though Iím trying to think of nice things, in the back of my head, all I can think is...
That damn spider.

I just canít ignore it anymore, it scares me too much, with its creepy-crawly legs.
I take a book and I squash it.
Itís so relieving.
It wonít crawl and scare me anymore.
But as soon as I take the book away and look at the squashed remains of the bug, I feel...guilty.
Look what Iíve done!
Nobody will love me if they know thereís dead spiders in my room!
I bury my head into my pillow, crying.
I try to forgive myself after a while.
I sit back up, and I assure myself I wonít hurt them any more.
I blink.

Thereís more spiders on my ceiling.
   
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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 28th 2020, 01:18 AM

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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 28th 2020, 08:28 AM

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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 28th 2020, 11:29 AM

I like how you formatted this- it looks like a spider!

This was well written and I can relate to the feelings portrayed in your writing!


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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 28th 2020, 11:07 PM

The lines look like two inverted spades put together for me.

But seriously, great job with this! I hope you share more of your work with us soon.


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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 29th 2020, 12:46 AM

This was lovely and I enjoyed reading it Thank you so much for sharing this with us


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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 31st 2020, 12:50 AM

I really like your writing style here, especially how it ended!


   
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Re: Poem I made a while back. - December 31st 2020, 02:13 PM

That was an incredible read, and so humane towards spiders. Me? I can't stand them, but all the same that was a beautifully written poem and I thank you!
   
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Re: Poem I made a while back. - January 2nd 2021, 08:44 PM

This is a really creatively written poem. First of all I love the way it looks visually like a spider. I can't help but really like visual poetry and that was a really clever format to use. I also really liked the poem itself and I feel like every single one of us has been in the position where we're scared of a spider but feel somewhat guilty for killing it I like that it hints at something deeper though. I hope you'll post more of your writing here! thank you for sharing



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Re: Poem I made a while back. - January 3rd 2021, 06:59 PM

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This is a really creatively written poem. First of all I love the way it looks visually like a spider. I can't help but really like visual poetry and that was a really clever format to use. I also really liked the poem itself and I feel like every single one of us has been in the position where we're scared of a spider but feel somewhat guilty for killing it I like that it hints at something deeper though. I hope you'll post more of your writing here! thank you for sharing
Thank you! To be honest, the formatting looking like a spider was actually an accident - I just wanted it to look centered, haha. But I'm very glad that you and everyone else has liked it - it's one of my favourite poems I've made
   
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