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Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 28th 2016, 02:21 PM

I struggle with spelling and was wondering if someone would be able to tell me if it all makes sense? Thank you so much!

JUSTIN SWANN
-----address was here
[email] email was here
phone number was here


PROFILE

An enthusiastic, friendly and hardworking person who is willing to learn new skills and take on exciting new challenges. I am reliable and believe I would be an invaluable asset to your team.

SKILLS

Intuitive in my previous roles I have often delivered solutions to problems before the issues fully came to life
Good IT skills I have wealth of experience across many different operating platforms such as Microsoft, Apple, Android and MS software including office.
Punctual very proactive always very reliable in regards to working hours.
Strong communication skills I'm very clear communicate across various levels including video calls, conference calls, emails.


EMPLOYMENT
EE Retail Apprentice. (August 2016 current)
In this role I have been employed as an apprentice retail assistant at EE in one of the busiest stores in the region. My responsiablitys in this role are cash handling, dealing with customer enquires, handing credit agreements and insurance agreements, fixing mobile phones and demonstrating how they work. I really enjoy working in a team in a customer focus target driven environment I feel working under pressure brings out the best of me and allows me to reach my individual sales targets.

Wallnut tree Waitress
In this role I was employed as waitress in a very fast paced restaurant environment. This role required good time management,organisation skills, ability to cope under pressure, work as part of a team. The role required me to manage different parts of the restaurant making sure all guests were comfortable and to manage their orders.

Smiggle - Retail Sales Assistant
In this role I have just been employed as part of the brand new team in the brand new Cambridge store. I was there to support and help the opening of this new flagship store and am incredibly proud of what I and the team achieved against a tight deadline. areas of experience I have gained in this role include, customer service, sales, visual merchandising, stock management, till operation and cash management. I'm really enjoying my role and feel this adds much more depth of experience as I carry on in my chosen career path.

Hermes 2015
In this role I was responsible for organising parcels, making sure orders were going in the correct vans and team work with the other employees to make sure that we were on task. The job role required me to work long hours and managing parcels at a high demand speed was essential. To complete this role I needed to use a range of skills such as team work, good communication skills, self motivation and good time keeping.

Work Placement, Select Furniture, Bury St Edmunds 2014
This was a two week work placement in a retail outlet selling office furniture. I was responsible for:

Providing a high level of customer service
Dealing with enquiries and potential issues related to orders
Liaising with other team members
Accompanying staff on furniture deliveries

Work Placement, King Pin Bowling, Ipswich 2012
This was a two week work placement in a ten pin bowling alley. I worked in the restaurant and the shoe exchange area.
Duties included:

Taking food orders
Dealing with enquiries regarding the food and arranging alternatives
Serving food and drinks
Organising the display
Food preparation
Handling money
Providing a high level of customer service at all times


EDUCATION

West Suffolk College 2013
Traineeship Pass
Level 2 Functional Skills: English ongoing
Level 2 Functional Skills: Maths ongoing
Vocational Studies: Level 1 Pass
Level 1 Functional Skills: English Pass

Kesgrave High School 2009 - 2013
BTEC Level 2 Extended Certificate: Applied Science Pass
Level 2 Certificate: Preparation for Working Life Pass

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I enjoy listening to music, socialising with friends and trying out new technology. I also enjoy gaming.

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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 28th 2016, 02:50 PM

You spelling is perfectly fine as well as your grammar. You also use wide range of vocabulary which is great. With a resume like that I believe you will get the job. Good luck!!
   
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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 28th 2016, 03:45 PM

Hi, this is really good! Just a couple of mistakes, but other than that a really impressive resume!

In the skills section, if you use a hyphen after each skill you mention (e.g. Intuitive - in my previous roles...) then it's a lot clearer otherwise you end up with a run on sentence. Also add a couple of commas in ("very proactive, always very reliable..." And "I'm very clear, communicate across...") again just to avoid run on sentences. Finally just ensure you have used a full stop at the end of each sentence.

In the EE part of the employment section you misspelled responsibilities. Also make your last sentence in that part into two sentences for clarity (I.e. Put a full stop after environment).

Make sure you capitalise "Tree" when talking about the restaurant.

In the Smiggle part use a capital letter at the beginning of the sentence "Areas of experience".

These are tiny errors and can be easily rectified, other than that the resume is great, you seem a very impressive candidate! I hope this makes sense, please message me if it doesn't! This is a really impressive resume, I wish you all the best with the job!

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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 28th 2016, 04:55 PM

Here would be my suggestions:

Remove "references available upon request". This is a given, they are going to ask for references no matter what on any standard application. You want to streamline your application so they are getting the most important information.

Since you are no longer in high school, you can remove that. Anyone in college would have graduated from high school. It is unnecessary on an adult resume.

Include date ranges for employment. May 2015- May 2016. This will give an idea on how long you worked somewhere and how much you learned during that time. All employment references should have date ranges, I noticed some don't have dates at all.

Make the format for employment descriptions the same. Don't bullet point some things and write sentences for others. When everything is in the same format it will look more polished.

I would also remove "interests". They probably don't care what you do on your own time and again, you want to streamline the information. Their time is valuable and you don't want to waste it with information that is not key to getting you hired.

I would recommend that "skills" be bullet points.

Add GPA in for college, as well as how long you have been there. Did you start in January of 2013 or August 2013?

Remember resumes are quick references for what you can provide this company. If they want to learn more detail about you and your previous experience they will ask for an interview. So you want to be brief, but informative.

That's my two cents. We worked a lot with resume building before I graduated from college and those are all suggestions I received from career counselors about my own resume.




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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 28th 2016, 08:27 PM

Yeah, you don't need to put GPA. That's gonna be extra information that most employers aren't gonna care about. My dad does hiring athis job and reviews resumes and all they care about is if you graduated. They don't need to know your GPA because that isn't gonna tell them much about how qualified you are.

I think everything that's been suggested is on point. You also want your resume to have a good template. Something that will pop out to the person looking at it. My dad made his own template and got all kinds of compliments on it.


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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 29th 2016, 12:16 AM

In addition to what's been said, here's a few things I would change/add:

'Wallnut tree Waitress'

Change Waitress to Waiter, or Serving Staff. This is because waitress is the female version of a waiter and you wouldn't want anyone to be confused!

Also where you have, 'In this role I was employed as waitress' make this so that it reads 'In this role I was employed as a waiter' or alternatively 'In this role I was employed as a member of the serving staff'

If I recall, in a previous thread where you'd shown your CV a fair amount of people didn't feel hobbies/interests were necessary, however I stand by what I said then, and that is that I most definitely think they're needed. In the 10 years I've been asked to do my CV by my school, my college tutors, JobCentre Plus staff and most recently by Careers Wales, they have always said to state this as it shows the employer what your interests are and what you enjoy doing. You can always tailor your hobbies/interests around whatever job you're applying for, providing of course you're truthful, and if you decide to write a cover letter/note you can always expand on them a little whilst keeping them relevant to the job you're applying for.


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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 29th 2016, 12:54 PM

In terms of your GPA, I disagree with some people. It depends on the place of employment in which you're applying. Many tech/engineering fields require a minimum GPA -- which by the sounds of it you may be applying for.


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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 29th 2016, 04:27 PM

Updated

what do you guys think of the updates I have made to my resume?
JUSTIN SWANN
Personal information here was removed


PROFILE

An enthusiastic, friendly and hardworking person who is willing to learn new skills and take on exciting new challenges. I am reliable and believe I would be an invaluable asset to your team.

SKILLS

Intuitive in my previous roles I have often delivered solutions to problems before the issues fully came to life
Good IT skills I have wealth of experience across many different operating platforms such as Microsoft, Apple, Android and MS software including office.
Punctual very proactive always very reliable in regards to working hours.
Strong communication skills I'm very clear communicate across various levels including video calls, conference calls, emails.


EMPLOYMENT
EE Retail Apprentice. (August 2016 current)
In this role I have been employed as an apprentice retail assistant at EE in one of the busiest stores in the region. My responsiablitys in this role are cash handling, dealing with customer enquires, handing credit agreements and insurance agreements, fixing mobile phones and demonstrating how they work. I really enjoy working in a team in a customer focus target driven environment I feel working under pressure brings out the best of me and allows me to reach my individual sales targets.

Wallnut tree Serving staff March 2016-May 2016
In this role I was employed as waiter in a very fast paced restaurant environment. This role required good time management,organisation skills, ability to cope under pressure, work as part of a team. The role required me to manage different parts of the restaurant making sure all guests were comfortable and to manage their orders.

Smiggle - Retail Sales Assistant September 2015-August 2016
In this role I have just been employed as part of the brand new team in the brand new Cambridge store. I was there to support and help the opening of this new flagship store and am incredibly proud of what I and the team achieved against a tight deadline. areas of experience I have gained in this role include, customer service, sales, visual merchandising, stock management, till operation and cash management. I'm really enjoying my role and feel this adds much more depth of experience as I carry on in my chosen career path.

Hermes 2015 January 2015-February 2015
In this role I was responsible for organising parcels, making sure orders were going in the correct vans and team work with the other employees to make sure that we were on task. The job role required me to work long hours and managing parcels at a high demand speed was essential. To complete this role I needed to use a range of skills such as team work, good communication skills, self motivation and good time keeping.

Work Placement, Select Furniture, Bury St Edmunds 2014
This was a two week work placement in a retail outlet selling office furniture. I was responsible for:

Providing a high level of customer service
Dealing with enquiries and potential issues related to orders
Liaising with other team members
Accompanying staff on furniture deliveries

Work Placement, King Pin Bowling, Ipswich 2012
This was a two week work placement in a ten pin bowling alley. I worked in the restaurant and the shoe exchange area.
Duties included:

Taking food orders
Dealing with enquiries regarding the food and arranging alternatives
Serving food and drinks
Organising the display
Food preparation
Handling money
Providing a high level of customer service at all times


EDUCATION

West Suffolk College 2013
Traineeship Pass
Level 2 Functional Skills: English ongoing
Level 2 Functional Skills: Maths ongoing
Vocational Studies: Level 1 Pass
Level 1 Functional Skills: English Pass

Kesgrave High School 2009 - 2013
BTEC Level 2 Extended Certificate: Applied Science Pass
Level 2 Certificate: Preparation for Working Life Pass

INTERESTS

I use to be part of the Kesgrave boys football team I have a passion for team work activities and group work I also was part of a successful basketball team at West Suffolk College. I also enjoy listening to music, socialising with friends and trying out new technology. I also enjoy gaming.

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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 30th 2016, 12:19 AM

You really should get rid of your interests. My dad is a pro at resumes because looking over them is part of his jobs. The employer doesn't want any extra information. They want what pertains to the job and things that will make you employable. Excess information is a turn off for most employers.

Maybe this is different outside of the United States but from what I know it's gonna do more harm then good to have that on your resume.


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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 30th 2016, 09:46 AM

I think whether or not to include interests on a CV can be debated Many UK websites have said that it's ok to put interests at the end of a CV provided that they are a) relevant and b) don't take up too much space.

However, if you don't feel comfortable with the interests at the end, I'm wondering if perhaps you could re-word them slightly and add them to your skills section? Something along the lines of getting on well with others and relating that to the sports teams you used to be in? And that you have a keen interest in technology and gaming or something?


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Re: Can some one check the spelling on my Resume please? - August 30th 2016, 01:30 PM

You don't put references on the resume, they will ask for references separately. And then there is still a list of duties for the bowling alley, when the rest of the resume is job descriptions. This doesn't seem to make sense to me and doesn't make the resume flow. Is there a particular reason you want to keep it like this?




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