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The Reunited Lovers (feedback please) - December 2nd 2014, 08:26 AM

The wind disturbs the dead leaves, making them rustle and scratch. She stands by the dead tree, silky hair blowing, gold eyes waiting hungrily. A twig snaps behind her. With a flash, her long painted nails dart to the silver dagger at her side. Her velvety red cape whooshes over her shoulder, and her long, flowing brown dress twirls around her. The. She sees him, in his raggedy tunic, covered in dirt, and his brown trousers, torn at the knees. Her delicate hand drops as her soft red lips turn up into a regal smile. But her sparkling gold eyes betray the happy indifference her mouth portrays. She runs to him, hood falling back off he head. He lifts her up and twirls her around. They embrace each other and kiss. Then he says, "I told you I would find you, no matter where you are," They kiss again, as the sun rises In the east, spilling red, gold, and pink over the horizon, and the two lovers, who have been reunited after years of searching.
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Re: The Reunited Lovers (feedback please) - December 2nd 2014, 09:46 AM

I like it. A little too descriptive for my usual tastes, but it all adds up to the finish. Only thing is... I want to know the backstory now.

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Re: The Reunited Lovers (feedback please) - December 2nd 2014, 02:19 PM

You have a way with words!

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Re: The Reunited Lovers (feedback please) - December 2nd 2014, 03:55 PM

I agree that you have a way with words. Thank you for sharing.

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