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Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 29th 2012, 12:00 AM
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I'm not going to put the whole prologue in here. I'm sure I would bore the hell out of you guys if I did that. So here's a little snippet of it. Please tell me your thoughts and if I should change anything. Thanks
 My hand ran across my smooth, soft wrist. Do I really want to do this? I thought back to how much I hated Criminal Minds and CSI, because I couldn't stand the sight of the blood. So why was I even thinking about doing this? Because I want to feel alive, I thought. Because I have friends who do it, and I know how much it helps them. Because I have no reason to live, why not harm myself? I took a deep breath, and placed the cold blade against my wrist. Slicing my veins open, I began to bleed out the guilt. The guilt of taking up space. The guilt of being a horrible friend. The guilt of being a horrible daughter and sister. And the guilt of being alive at all. I know it's only a small part of the prologue, but what do you guys think? |
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 29th 2012, 04:22 AM
Would certainly love to read more to see where you're going with this and what else you intend to add. Very unique start though.
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January 29th 2012, 04:25 AM
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 29th 2012, 06:09 AM
i really liked that. hope you post more of it. i'd definitely love to read more.
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 29th 2012, 01:29 PM
I love reading...and I would definitely love to read more. Keep writing!
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 29th 2012, 05:36 PM
Very nice start! I really enjoyed the connection you made to CSI and the other crime shows. I think it helps the reader to understand the desperation of someone who self-harms: They're not "twisted freaks" who love the sight of their own blood. Most of the time, they're simply looking for relief.
Really nice! Keep it up! Would love to read more!
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 31st 2012, 10:38 AM
I'd like to read more!
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
January 31st 2012, 02:02 PM
I'd love to read more.
Great job so far.
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Re: Prolouge to a novel I'm writing -
February 1st 2012, 12:22 AM
The details are exquiste, and so intense. I loved it
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