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Thesis statement - October 30th 2015, 05:33 AM

So this paper's due in 9 hours, so this was silly... Anyway, I'm writing a paper for my Asian literature class about how fiction was used to attack Confucianist tradition in China. I was gonna post my current thesis statement, but I realized that I would get busted for plagiarism because turnitin would find the entire statement on this website.
You don't need to know the topic, you just need to know how to write. So basically, here it is simplified: Despite its status as a lower form of literature in China, fiction was an important tool in attacking Confucianist tradition. That isn't to say that anti-confucianists had a monopoly on the fiction genre, but many important works had profound messages of anti-confucianism. This story, this story, and this story all attacked confucianism in different ways: this story attacked the Confucianist tradition of hierarchy, this story took shots at filial piety and patriarchy, and this story tore into Confucianism as a whole by presenting a metaphor showing that the entire philosophy of Confucianism was madness that was holding back China.
So yeah, even the real version isn't good. It's hard to make this definitive like a thesis statement should be, because I only have room for 3 works. I also can only measure the effects of the last story on Confucianism because it was basically the Communist Manifesto shown as Chinese fiction, and it was extremely influential. We have a big course pack with the stories and backgrounds of the writers, but it doesn't explain the effects on society. Any way I can clean this up?


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Re: Thesis statement - October 30th 2015, 06:05 AM

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So basically, here it is simplified: Despite its status as a lower form of literature in China, fiction was an important tool in attacking Confucianist tradition. That isn't to say that anti-confucianists had a monopoly on the fiction genre, but many important works had profound messages of anti-confucianism. This story, this story, and this story all attacked confucianism in different ways: this story attacked the Confucianist tradition of hierarchy, this story took shots at filial piety and patriarchy, and this story tore into Confucianism as a whole by presenting a metaphor showing that the entire philosophy of Confucianism was madness that was holding back China.
So yeah, even the real version isn't good. It's hard to make this definitive like a thesis statement should be, because I only have room for 3 works. I also can only measure the effects of the last story on Confucianism because it was basically the Communist Manifesto shown as Chinese fiction, and it was extremely influential. We have a big course pack with the stories and backgrounds of the writers, but it doesn't explain the effects on society. Any way I can clean this up?
I actually don't think it's that bad, you can cut out this part to make it shorter:"That isn't to say that anti-confucianists had a monopoly on the fiction genre, but" the first sentence is your thesis statement, aside from that, provide specific examples of how or when each work attacked Confucianism and you should be fine.


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Re: Thesis statement - October 30th 2015, 07:29 AM

Thanks a lot! Also, something else I'd like to ask is for a good title for this? I'm trying to steer away from "how fiction affected confucianism" and things like that, because I can't prove that most of it had an effect on it. I can't use Confucianism vs. Fiction, but I need a title that conveys the fact that Chinese fiction attacked Confucianism.
The thesis is more important though.


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Re: Thesis statement - October 30th 2015, 07:44 AM

Yeah, the thesis statement is just a fancy way of saying the sentence or paragraph that states your main idea then the rest of the paper uses examples to demonstrate your point which you've done fine with.

How about "Anti-Confucianism themes in Chinese Fiction"?


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October 30th 2015, 08:13 AM

Not bad, indeed... I'll use it, thanks!
I can't wait to go to bed. It's been a couple days.

Christ. I think I severely fucked this up... I don't think this topic is eligible.

Yup. I fucked up. I got 4 hours to write a new paper. FUCK ME

Well, I did it. And its actually a better paper. But as I'm going on my third day without sleep, this still sucks.


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