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Song I wrote...? - June 22nd 2011, 11:22 PM

Hi I wrote a song based on this situation I am in...there is this guy that really likes me but I don't feel the same way. We've been going back and forth for the longest time, so I wrote a song about it. Please feel free to critique me


theres just no way to describe
what im feeling inside
i really do care for you
just not the way you want me to
theres nothing i can change
ill always be the same
youre chasing a parked car
and not getting very far

we're two ships passing in the night
the same plane but a different flight
a train rolling on the track
its not looking back
when will this crazy ride end
i just want to be your friend

im getting lost in this maze
its been a game well played
we need to call it quits
no winner, no loser, just two simple forfeits
this is all changing us
stopping isnt an option, its a must
i cant go on this road
my hearts got such a heavy load

we're two ships passing in the night
the same plane but a different flight
a train rolling on the track
its not looking back
when will this crazy ride end
i just want to be your friend

im hoping you listen to my plea
im hoping you can now see
im hoping we can both agree
im hoping we can resolve this peacefully



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Re: Song I wrote...? - June 23rd 2011, 04:41 AM

I think this Thread would go in Self Expression, but I still really like the song I sometimes feel like this too, heh. Anyway, I kinda really love this!
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Re: Song I wrote...? - June 24th 2011, 01:46 AM

thanks for sharing this it's really good
   
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Re: Song I wrote...? - June 25th 2011, 03:43 PM

I love all of the rhyming. This is really good.
Thank you for posting it.


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