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Your View - January 22nd 2011, 08:21 PM

i have yet to paid for it to be hosted but i want your views on the site. what is spelt wrong or doesnt make sense, what can be added etc ... be as honest as needed

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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 10:49 AM

No one gunna have a look for me ?


   
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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 01:01 PM

Front page:
-Just a few minor spelling mistakes Emma's testimonial has a few, as does the last sentence of paragraph 2 ("currently", should be "current"), 2nd sentence paragraph 3 "and are unsure".

Incubator:
- last sentence paragraph 1 "what goes in the incubator" as opposed "and".

Care Sheet:

-"Leopard Geckos do not need height".
- The first sentence of substrate needs looking at.
- Last sentence of temperature, "causing possible burns".
- Calcium dish, "for all our", also full stop at the end.

Care Sheet Disclaimer:
- (3) Professional Assistance, 3 sentence "seek immediate"

Incubation Service:

- "reptile will come"

These are the only real spelling issues that I could pick out. As far as website design goes I am no expert but didn't encounter any issues when navigating.
There are a few bits here and there that I would have worded differently but you have to keep some level of personal touch
Maybe a glossary?
Also, really minor point, I think there are a fair few Nouns in there that could do with capital letters (but as I said really minor).
I'm sure there are some more teck-savy Th members that will lend a hand

(Loved the gallery by the way)


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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 02:25 PM

thanks for the help you have given. And im glad you got around the site with no problems and found the gallery really good

i have updated and changed all the things you have stated... will have another read through to see if i pick up on anything.


   
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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 02:29 PM

hey I'm busy with revision atm and had a quick glance. It looks really nice! Anyway, I shall have a look through it at some point today and give you a few pointers
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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 02:37 PM

above - no problem. thanks for the quick comment and feel free to glance when you have the time, dont want to take you away from getting good grades


   
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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 02:42 PM

On Incubation service it says:
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And these are our terms and conditions

* We keep half the eggs that are hatched (we take it in turns to pick)

* We are able to keep all the eggs if you need be (if you dont want the eggs we may be able to offer something small towards them)

* We can keep or sell our half of the eggs
The 1st and 3rd are pretty much the same. You could just change the first one to

"We keep half the eggs that are hatched (we take it in turns to pick) and have permission to sell them."

and then you can remove the last one.

Also Emma's testimony says "I?m" instead of "I'm"

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Re: Your View - January 23rd 2011, 02:54 PM

Thanks for pointing it out and now done


   
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