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Exclamation Me - April 3rd 2009, 10:02 PM

My name is unknown
My face remains blank
My boat is left sailing
Although my ship sank.

My body a temple
My thoughts are racing
The end is near
Its death I'm facing

Slice with a razor
Feel the pain
Slice with scissors
Again & again

Darkness surrounds
It takes control
Hallucinations
Feed on my soul

I hear voices
Day & night
But no-one is here
To say it's alright

Men in black capes
Take over my mind
I know they are theyre
But what will I find

Blood on the walls
Blood on the floor
I cant do this
Cant take anymore.


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Re: Me - April 4th 2009, 01:27 AM

Wow your a awesome writer keep up the awesome work and if ya ever nd 2 talk I'm here u writtin is deep real deep
   
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Re: Me - April 4th 2009, 05:51 PM

This is an amazing poem; it is really very powerful.
I really love the first and last stanzas, and everything else flows with them so well.
You really are a great writer


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" He has no remorse for his actions,
And feels nothing but pleasure.
To see her suffer is his joy-
And her innocence is his treasure. "

is this what you really want from me..?
   
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Re: Me - April 5th 2009, 02:52 AM

The only tip I could give would be to work some on your punctuation with the poems themselves. The content is just fine.

I marked this as triggering due to the self injury content.


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