Peace (another poem I wrote)
This is another poem I wrote over the weekend and I need some honest to goodness opinions. Constructive criticism is encouraged and please don't tell me it's good if it's not because no offense but that doesn't really help. Thanks do much sorry if I was harsh. :) all comments are welcome.
Peace Calm Filling your soul Bubbling up Like a brook* After a heavy storm Warm Like assfault in summer Comforting Like a favorite stuffed toy A constant reminder Of childhoods past Indescribable* Like a sudden calm in your heart Knowing inside* You will be safe for another day The dark clouds roll away The thunder subsides And you can finally sleep All is well until the morning comes |
Re: Peace (another poem I wrote)
I love this :)
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Re: Peace (another poem I wrote)
I love the flow of this. Check spellcheck on a few words and you're golden!
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Re: Peace (another poem I wrote)
You're really talented. Wow. :)
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Re: Peace (another poem I wrote)
I like this a lot! :) I agree with everyone.
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