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What do you think of my poem? -
September 1st 2012, 10:05 PM
Hey guys,
I'm fairly new here. I love to write and this is one of my newest poems. Tell me what you think. It's called "Broken Beyond Repair"
I cannot let go of the past.
I'm always contemplating which day should be my last.
Life is a beautiful lie, death is the ugly truth.
It's all about fighting the battles of your youth.
I wish I was someone other than me.
I'm fighting to make the mirror happy.
The weight I lose is never enough.
This is life, It's time to get tough.
While I'm starving to be thin,
I cut to release the pain from within.
As I watch my pain bleed out,
I am silent, but I want to shout.
Anxiety makes me unable to breathe.
Screw this life, I want to leave.
Anxiety keeps me up all night.
I don't have much more of a fight.
I hide my depression with a smile.
As life flashes before me, I'm in denial.
Everything looks so bleak.
I am tired, and so weak.
I'm tired of living in this hell.
I wish this was my last farewell.
I live my life in constant doubt.
Suicide seems like the only way out.
I lost the battle, not the war.
Someday, recovery will come knocking at my door.
Re: What do you think of my poem? -
September 4th 2012, 07:03 AM
This is amazing! You're really talented, i'd love to read more poems.
The part that stood out the most to me is, "It's all about fighting battles with your youth" That brought back memories. Keep writing.
Re: What do you think of my poem? -
September 4th 2012, 11:13 PM
Thanks for all the good feedback I've posted another one under 'self expression' It's called 'Silent Screams' I will post poems as often as I can. I would like feedback on that, too please.
If clarity's in death, then why won't this die?
Years of tearing down our banners, you and I
Living for the thrill of hitting you where it hurts Give me back my girlhood, it was mine first
Re: What do you think of my poem? -
September 5th 2012, 12:28 AM
I love it. I love to write, too. I wrote a poem book (Called Schizophrenic) and put it on Figment. If you don't know what figment is, know what it is cause it's awesome!
Re: What do you think of my poem? -
September 12th 2012, 09:40 AM
I love it! Keep it UP!
Jay.
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A whisper in the dark; is better than silence in the light. -Courtesy of your's truly.
My blog is open to all, those whom are easily triggered avoid, it's a story about a girl and her life and how far she has come over the years. If you read it, I hope it inspires you to keep fighting and to NEVER give up!
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