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Post Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 04:58 PM

I wrote a little something. I'm calling it a poem, although I'm not sure it can be called a poem!
I wrote it today in class because I was bored (I had finished early). I think it's really good, considering I did it in only 10 minutes or something.
Please tell me any names that you think would suit it!

Well, here goes!

"A blood curdling scream shatters the peaceful, dark night.
A police siren howls throughout the empty darkness.

Footsteps crush the frosted grass.
Shouts echo through the humid air.

Run?
Hide?

Or stay and be caught?

Confusion.
Fear.
Anger.
Betrayal.

Questions.

But no answers.

The thread between life and death growing thinner for many.

Some will have luck.
Some won’t.

But that’s life.
Some are lucky.
Some aren’t.

It depends on us what to do with it.
Like it depends on them what to do with theirs.

What is it worth?"

Thanks for reading!
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 07:08 PM

Wow, this is amazing! It's like I can imagine what's going on.
I'm not sure of a name though, sorry. Some of our other members may be able to suggest things though!


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Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 07:31 PM

I like this a lot! The imagery is very vivid
And I can't really think of a name either I suck at stuff like that.
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 07:36 PM

Thanks you guys! I really appreciate it, since my work usually is just thrown away! Thanks so much!
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 08:46 PM

Don't throw it away! You're really talented I can imagine this being the preface or the beginning of a book. One that I would definitely continue reading.

There are some really cool novels written in verse out there, too. If you ever wanted to, I'm sure you'd do an amazing job at it.


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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 21st 2013, 09:18 PM

Wow, thanks, LuckyNo.Infinity! This is all so wierd for me with all these compliments... So I'm confused, but as happy as can be. Thank you for making me feel better!
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 22nd 2013, 03:32 AM

I love this a lot! The first of it really sets a mood. It's amazing. Please don't throw it away... And write more.

Names, hmm... I'm not quite sure. I'm horrible with coming up with names for something lol, but maybe something like... Scream In The Night or Dark Frost?
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 22nd 2013, 07:43 AM

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I love this a lot! The first of it really sets a mood. It's amazing. Please don't throw it away... And write more.

Names, hmm... I'm not quite sure. I'm horrible with coming up with names for something lol, but maybe something like... Scream In The Night or Dark Frost?
I'll try to finish early more often, then more poems will come to mind!
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Re: Wrote a nameless poem... - March 23rd 2013, 05:05 PM

this is awesome!!
vivid, keeps your attention, lovely c:
and like Lux said, I could see it in a book's preface as well


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