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Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - January 31st 2014, 09:11 PM

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After so many years, she dares to speak,
Yet her mouth can't form a sound.
She tries to scream for help,
But no one is around.

Oh it has been like this for so long;
Surely she can survive just another day?
Just hush your voice and cover the bruises
Or you will certainly pay.

A silent threat is written in his eyes-
So full of anger and rage.
Yet she must wear a mask to hide the fear,
Feeling trapped, as if behind the steel bars of a cage.

And now, there are more consequences to come,
For he knows she broke his only rule-
Destroyed the silence that was his protection.
Who would have thought this game could be so cruel?

Perhaps she should have learned by now
Not to challenge the way the world is.
Now not only had her own life been ruined,
But after so many years, also his.


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - January 31st 2014, 09:19 PM

Wow. I like it! I'm not sure what to say, though. It's one of those powerful pieces that leave you silent for a few moments. Very strong and powerful. Good job!


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - January 31st 2014, 09:23 PM

Thanks so much. I really appreciate it.


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - January 31st 2014, 11:58 PM

I agree with Cassie. This is wonderful and a very powerful piece!


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 1st 2014, 02:18 PM

Thank you. I'm glad you like it.


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 1st 2014, 08:23 PM

I agree, there's tons of power with this!


   
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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 1st 2014, 08:30 PM

Thanks so much.


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 1st 2014, 09:16 PM

This is really powerful. Thank you for sharing.


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 2nd 2014, 12:36 PM

Thanks for reading it and commenting!


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Re: Don't Speak. Feedback would be greatly appreciated! - February 4th 2014, 12:34 AM

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