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Tigereyes March 6th 2014 12:22 AM

NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
May be triggering on abuse and/or self harm. Let me know what you think.


The yelling echoes down the hall.
On my hands and knees, I crawl
To the only safe place in my home,
But I'm not even safe when I'm alone.
The yelling turns to screaming,
And I only wish I was dreaming;
But as I hear the house come crashing down,
I cover my ears, trying to block out the sound
Of my life falling apart before my eyes,
Yet I smile to conceal all the lies
That I let the world believe about me.
But sometimes, I just want them to see
That I'm not okay anymore,
That it's not safe here like it was before
Because even if I can escape them,
I have another battle to try to win.
Behind the closed door, it calls my name,
And I am torn between the relief and the shame.
I always thought a home is supposed be safe,
Not another place that feeds off of hate.
Well, it turned out that I was wrong.
I'm not alright; I've known it all along.
So when I leave, I'm never coming back-
Leave it behind and let the memories fade to black.

Ennui. March 6th 2014 12:24 AM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
I love this! Maybe you can title it "Behind closed doors" or "Home?"

hocus pocus March 6th 2014 04:08 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
This is wonderful, it pulled me in. ^.^ Beautiful job. What about "Unsafe" or "Escape"?

DeletedAccount63 March 6th 2014 05:50 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
I Loved it. I was going to say something like "unsafe" But then I like Dez's idea of "Behind Closed Doors"

Tigereyes March 6th 2014 09:44 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
Thanks everyone. It means a lot to me. Also, thanks for the title suggestions. I really like all of them a lot, but I think I'm going with "Behind Closed Doors."

DeletedAccount12 March 6th 2014 10:12 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
I really like this one, it's really powerful and worded great. I like the title suggestions previously posted so I don't have much suggestions. ^.^

Tigereyes March 7th 2014 12:21 AM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
Thank you so much!

stelles March 7th 2014 12:35 AM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
Awesome! Sorry, I can't really help with a title... I totally suck at thinking of names for my stuff :bleh:

Azure. March 7th 2014 11:14 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
I loved this one! It really told a story well. :) Something about closed doors was going to be my suggestion for a title, but I see you've already decided on something similar. :bleh:

Tigereyes March 9th 2014 07:42 PM

Re: NEW POEM. And I need help with a title.
 
Thanks so much!


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