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Windward September 11th 2016 11:59 PM

Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
This poem is actually titled "In Love With You, I Will Remain". It also sucks, that'll happen sometimes.

To be in love is to break your legs
Until no longer can you stand so tall.
But in love with you I will remain
Until I feel that small.

It pains me always, it hurts my heart
That what you feel is not this love for me.
And if pain and love are all I know
I do not know what else I could be.

But did I choose this for myself?
Is there rhyme or reason for this madness?
I would think not, but love is love
And this love is the reason for this sadness.

To be in love is to hurt yourself
But to never wish this pain on you.
So in love with you I will remain
Until it's that pain that runs me through.

It's an impossible game that I play
To want your love but not your pain.
But you could never love someone
Whose love for you drives them insane.

So don't fall in love, my love
For you just have far too much to lose.
Take it from me, and from my heart
That love will not love; it will bruise.

To be in love is to have some hope
That this love will not end in your fall.
So in love with you I will remain
Until I am nothing at all.

Storyteller. September 12th 2016 01:06 AM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
I don't think this is cheesy at all; I think it's deep and meaningful, and kind of sweetly sad. I really like the way you structured it and I hope you decide to share some more of your work with us soon. :)

Ennui. September 12th 2016 04:39 PM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
Don't be sorry! This isn't cheesy. It's really nice.

Elision September 12th 2016 07:07 PM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
This definitely isn't cheesy, I actually find it very emotional, it's beautiful. Thank you for sharing :hug:

hocus pocus September 13th 2016 02:01 PM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
I agree, I don't think it's cheesy either. It's really beautiful. I would love to see some more of your work soon too.

Sophrosyne September 21st 2016 10:55 AM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
Nice tags you got going there, but this isn't cheesy at all. I would very much love to know who this about. ;) But seriously though, this is quite amazing. You should totally post more often.

DeletedAccount69 September 22nd 2016 02:58 AM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
This wasn't cheesy! I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing! Do you think you'll share more in the future?

Windward September 22nd 2016 08:55 PM

Re: Cheesy Love Poem (sorry)
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by ~Abibliophobe~ (Post 1253476)
This wasn't cheesy! I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing! Do you think you'll share more in the future?

I will, yes. Although someone did laugh at me for this poem :'( I guess I'll just have to do better next time.


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