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WhisperingSilence

May 20th 2017 09:10 PM

success

success is apparantly everything,
or so they say,
its your life and your future,
its everything you are ,
thats what they say,
wake up every day trying to succeed,
only to fail and feel unfullfilled,
get a job,
stop being a slob,
come on succeed,
success is apprantly everything
or so they say
but what happens when
your only success is getting out of bed?
with a heart heavy and full of dread?
as you try to escape your own head?
its an internal battle no body sees,
yet they say you gotta succeed.

Everglow.

May 20th 2017 11:10 PM

Re: success

This is really good. I especially like the rhythm towards the end where you have the three rhyming lines. It also puts a twist on what success is. I hope to read some more soon. :)

Ennui.

May 21st 2017 10:30 PM

Re: success

I definitely can relate. It's definitely important to remember even just getting out of bed can be a success for some.

.Brittany.

May 24th 2017 09:26 PM

Re: success

I always love reading your work! Keep it up.

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