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Cool Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 18th 2018, 12:51 PM

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(I just kinda made this at random one day at school and I figured I may as well share it here, even if it doesn't appear to have a linear point that I can find in its rhymes. It has some violence in it for some reason.)

(Meant to be read in an ironic cheerful tone)

You try to work, the lights go out.
Your ego bites to spread the doubt.

So you lay your head down and pretend to be asleep.
You frown as childhood nightmares, in your room they meet.

An older staff lady enquires, "Are you okay?"
You wonder if it's protocol, like auto recall you obey.

"Yeah, I'm fine." you sigh, don't wanna die from anotha dirty line on your desk.
Sign another check on your life, rife with ironic optimism, in truth it's pessimism.

Yo therapists need to piss, your fam hella pissed at'chu.
Take a lissssten to the sound of that hissssin' in your neck.

Defensive offence, but is anybody truly protected? Dude, really?
Feel the violence buildin' inside, see 'em on the flip side. Someday surely.

Deeper and deeper and deeper I dig, you dig?
Psychedelic shit, pussy shit, a game you gotta rig.

Don't you dare cry to anybody, lest your body drop.
Allow your trigger-finger-lickin' cop come and let their buddy pop some.

Pop 'em pills to take away the internal pain, another atop another as a distraction.
Meanwhile, who's askin'? Where are all ya people who said they loved you?

To have coveted you and gutted you and hold your hand while smiling.
Plunge the thousandth knife deeper while they lying and of this you rhyming.

Don't you be crying now.
(Now kids, don't you be crying.)

Ain't it obviously a crime against humanity?
(Ain't it obvious now children? So don't you be crying.)

Don't you be rhyming. (Don't you be rhyming now.)
Your silence and compliance is all we need.


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Re: Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 18th 2018, 05:53 PM

I liked this.

Thank you for sharing.


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Re: Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 18th 2018, 09:54 PM

no worries. Thanks for reading. c:


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Re: Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 19th 2018, 06:11 AM

I do enjoy the writing style here!


   
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Re: Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 19th 2018, 06:59 PM

This was so goood! <3 thank you for sharing it!
   
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Re: Silent Episode ~ Random Vent Rap??? - February 20th 2018, 08:03 AM

Thankyou guys for reading. I didn't even focus on the flow that much, I just kinda freestyled it, but with my brain. I'm hoping to use idioms, metaphors, entrendre's etc. more often to spice things up a little. I'm considering using garden-path sentences as practice to achieve normalcy in the usage of these types of elements in writing. :3


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