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me, the loud typer. - July 6th 2009, 01:59 AM

you always used to
laugh
when i typed poems
about love
and other myths.

you said the
clickety clack
of my keyboard
woke you up.

but i knew you lay in bed
completely awake
and waited for me to start typing
so you could come in and complain.

you said you always hated
how i nagged you
"stop the drinking,
stop the drugs,
you're too beautiful."
i'd say.

but i almost wonder
if you kept at it
just so we'd have something
anything
to talk about again.

when i told you
that i wanted a puppy
you scoffed
you said:
"you can't handle yourself,
a puppy is out of the question."

but i have to admit
when i woke up on christmas morning
to a tiny puppy tongue licking my nose
i wasn't surprised.

one time
you asked me
on a scale of one to ten
how much i loved you.

i was afraid i'd sound stupid
if i told you
numbers don't reach high enough.

so i said seven
because it was the number of times
i'd traced the veins in your arms
that night.

you would always reiterate
how ridiculous it was
that i was always cold.

but ridiculous or not
you always brought your jacket
and hardly ever wore it
yourself.

when i heard the word
overdosed
it strangled me
like the heart of an artichoke
stuck in your throat.

you promised me it would
never happen
i'm careful, you said.
but you always were a
beautiful liar.

i got rid of my puppy
because
every time he cried
out in hunger
or peed
on the floor
it would just remind me
that you were right:

i can't handle anything.

sometimes i lay in bed
cold, alone, counting.

so far
i can't make the numbers go high enough
maybe one day
i will.

but i doubt it.

and now
when i'm cold
i pile on your coats
five or six at a time

until i'm sweating
sweating so much
i can't tell when the sweat
turns into tears.

and as i type this
i wonder
if you'd be up right now
complaining about how
loud my keyboard is.

i'm punching the keys down
too forcefully
thinking
maybe i'll wake you up.

experimentation with formatting, it's a little strange i know.
but feedback would be super duper amazing.


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 7th 2009, 05:25 AM

I'm not sure what to say, other than that this is a really, really beautiful poem. I damn near cried. Honestly.
   
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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 7th 2009, 03:18 PM

Aww.. that's all I can really say.. It's so.. touching. Beautiful.




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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 7th 2009, 11:43 PM

thank you so much.
i was starting to think nobody read it.


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 8th 2009, 03:04 PM

I really like it...


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 8th 2009, 05:38 PM

It was a very beautiful poem. It was amazing. I'm speechless. It seems too real. So amazing. its so good. Like I can't describe how real that poem was.

Write more. Maybe a hapier one. That one was so touching. You have amazing talent.


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 8th 2009, 06:22 PM

haha happier got it :]
thank you so much.


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 8th 2009, 10:11 PM

lol, well its good either way. But sometimes its hard to write poems that steer in a positive direction sometimes. Like I have to try really hard to do so. I don't know why. And sometimes happier poems tend to be boring. But you seem to be a very talented writer, so I think you can do it. =]


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Re: me, the loud typer. - July 9th 2009, 12:59 AM

yeah it's harder to make writing emotional if it's happy for some reason...
i can try :]


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