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The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 28th 2010, 04:30 AM

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This is triggering in the areas of suicide, substances, and abuse.
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I dreamed upon a midnight dawn,
When all the stars had fallen
And all the hope was gone.

I dreamed upon a midnight dawn,
Who knew you'd find me here
Dead on your front lawn.

I got so drunk I couldn't stand
I got so high I couldn't think
Couldn't count the fingers on my hand

Soon the mornings will rise
And the clouds will come to life
When even the brightest star dies

It was a peaceful way to go
I can honestly say, I wasn't afraid
I only fear life, unconscious in the snow

I dreamed, that's all that counts upon death's door
Not the memories I made,
Or the moment you found me on the floor

The TV set shows, my ugly face
They tell you all about my final fight
But the real battle? It ended that night.

They show my father crying,
Just like the days he hit me,
Drunk and high, he's reason one for dying.

Honorable mention, goes out to reason two
For depression is a battle,
And the darkness that consumes you.

In third place comes high school,
Where they laughed at all my scars
Fed off my pain, if it meant they'd be 'cool.'

Fourth places goes out to despair
Why me? Why not them? Why?
And how can life be fair?

I tried to talk, no one would listen
Black clothes and heavy scars, were never quite enough
When I'm dead, my brown eyes won't glisten

My dad will be angry, that the glass is now shattered
On the precious door, of his liquor Cabinet
And that I broke the bottles; to the floor they clattered.

Who cares if I barely even got to live?
They only saw my smile,
And all I did was give.

They say the weak ones go to Hell
But really I am strong
Watching my stars, as the very last fell

I finished the last bottle, of the drink that you love
Now I hope when I'm dead, one dream will come true
That there really is a kingdom, far up above

I close my eyes with the hope,
Of a love of my own
I close my eyes with the hope,
That I won't be alone.

I dreamed upon a midnight dawn
That one day I'd live, among the stars
I dreamed upon a midnight dawn...
Look at me now... I've come so far.





A lonely soul in a land of broken hearts


   
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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 28th 2010, 10:04 AM

You write really well! That was great.
Good use of imagery and repetition.
Keep writing.
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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 28th 2010, 11:18 PM

I really enjoyed reading this Amanda


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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 29th 2010, 11:01 AM

Amanda, I love your writing. You're very talented. Keep on writing, girl.
   
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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 29th 2010, 01:18 PM

This is very good, i enjoyed reading it... Keep it up!
   
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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 29th 2010, 03:02 PM

Your writing is just...........no words.........each poem you write gets better and better,


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Re: The Dawn Of Midnight. - May 30th 2010, 03:55 AM

Oh my! Amanda! This was one of the best poems I have ever read! This was so amazing!
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