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feedback would be great - August 11th 2010, 05:08 PM

Hell now its so game on
Because you're on the run
From anything and everyone
Because the light's now gone
Backed up against the wall
Make sure you never fall
Only one more chance to stall
To try your best and survive it all

So rise yourself from off the floor
Stop fighting everybody's war
Because they won't care anymore
Get back to basics from before

So much pressure to prevail
When the moon is bright and pale
Life's a thankless lonely tale
And when your destiny's to fail
You can only hope to hide
Where moons and suns collide
Before the fates can then decide
Whether or not you truly lied

So rise yourself from off the floor
Stop fighting everybody's war
Because they won't care anymore
Get back to basics from before

There's that shade of grey
That's always here to stay
So give your heart away
And maybe learn someday
That there's another way

Bury me burn me
Maybe I'll die early
Bury me freeze me
Maybe I'll die easy

But no matter what
You have to rise from off the floor
And no matter what
You can't fight everybody's war


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Re: feedback would be great - August 12th 2010, 03:18 AM

Beautiful! I absolutely loved it but then again I enjoy everything you write.


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Re: feedback would be great - August 12th 2010, 12:08 PM

Thanks Jenna


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Re: feedback would be great - August 12th 2010, 10:19 PM

amayzing amayzing amayzing and i could go on forever saying how amayzing your work is Amelia. its seriously even more amayzing than that.


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Re: feedback would be great - August 13th 2010, 09:32 AM

haha thanks a lot Jordan


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Re: feedback would be great - August 13th 2010, 09:38 AM

i liked it good job.
   
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Re: feedback would be great - August 13th 2010, 11:20 AM

Thanks very much


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Re: feedback would be great - August 16th 2010, 06:59 AM

Your work still manages to impress me Amelia (:
this is awesome!

i think i found the flow of it a little bit more difficult to read than some of your other ones, but i got through it.
the only thing i would say needed work was the flow.
but it's still managable (:

another great piece of writing!


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Re: feedback would be great - August 17th 2010, 05:44 AM

Amazing job Amelia. I legit, run out of compliments.





   
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Re: feedback would be great - August 18th 2010, 09:44 PM

Thanks guys


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