Beautiful

[shingen]

I posted this several years back. It's written for my angel, Laura. I love you baby. ^_^
Anyways, I digress. Just wanted to repost for some feedback. Might enter it in a comp.

Beautiful- she looks down
To an angel she has found
I sit- with broken wings
Stained with blood but then she sings
She says

It doesn't matter what you've done
You will always be the one
And you can turn to me for help
When you loose faith in yourself

I look to her- from blue eyes
Was never strong enough to cry
So graceful- she curves her lips
Into a smile as she sits
Next to me- about to speak
But first her hand touches my cheek
She says

Someone did this for me once
Now what is it you fear so much?

Fire's gonna rain
The sky is gonna tear
And hell is gonna take me
Because heaven doesn't care
And I don't wanna live in fire
But I can't take the cold
So I pray that hell will take me soon
Before I go there on my own
She says

It doesn't matter what you've done
You will always be the one
And you can turn to me for help
When you're slipping into hell

For the first time in sweet memory
The tears begin to shine
As I look back to the cemetery
Of the things locked in my mind
The blood on my wings began to float
-Away into the sky
As the fire started to disappear
-And I looked into her eyes
And she said

It doesn't matter what you've done
You will always be the one
And you can turn to me for help
I will protect you from hell

As my wings began to crumble
And my wounds began to heal
I looked up to this goddess
And she was all that I could feel
So I spoke these words
As she pressed her lips against my skin
"Baby I was never an angel,
and if I was: I was fallen"

Fire's gonna rain
The sky is gonna tear
And hell can try to take me
Even if heaven doesn't care
I don't wanna live in fire
And I can't take the cold
So my guardian beauty saved
This angel with no soul

A couple of edits since last time. Don't know how it worked out. Meh.

[Bishpot]

This is really beautiful, I wish I was as talented as you. I think you should enter it into a competition

[Obsidian]

If you think this is beautiful you should see the guy that wrote it ^_-. I'd share my point of view on the poem but I'm afraid I suffer horrendous amounts of bias. I love you too baby x

[Kitty.]

You are so incredibly talented!