| Home | Get Advice | Register | Login | Mission | Support Forums | Articles | Videos | Resources | Volunteer | Donate | Contact Us |
|
||||||||||||||
| ||||||||||||||
 |
 |
You are not registered or have not logged in |
|
Hello guest! (Not a guest? Log in above!) As a guest on TeenHelp you are only able to use some of our site's features. By registering an account you will be able to enjoy unlimited access to our site, and will be able to:
Signing up is free, anonymous and will only take a few moments, so click here to register now! We hope you consider joining us and hope to see you around! |
| TeenHelp Features | |||
 |
|
 |
 |
| Search TeenHelpAdvanced |
 |
 |
|
|
Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
(#1 (permalink))
|
 I am your density.
 Outside, huh? ********** 
Name: Chessica.
Location: Underneath a southern sky.
Posts: 4,025
Join Date: September 20th 2009
|
Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 7th 2011, 03:12 AM
So, honestly, I have no idea why I wrote this. I don't even think I like it. If you don't like it, feel free to tell me; I won't be offended.
 Also, if you're looking for some kind of rhythm or rhyming scheme, don't bother; there is none.  I write my feelings on a piece of paper - loops and curls, lies and confessions - ribbons of paper tear as I destroy my soul. I take the sheet of paper, the scraps of thoughts - mangled letters, mad lines - perfect snowflakes, each one delicate and destructive. I set the feelings free, over the ocean - a release of emotion, a reflection of evil - scattered in the water, like flecks of redemption. Nothing in the world is the way it ought to be. It's harsh, and cruel. But that's why there's us - champions. Doesn't matter where we come from, what we've done or suffered, or even if we make a difference. We live as though the world is as it should be, to show it what it can be. |
|
|
|
|
(#2 (permalink))
|
|
<3 <3 </3 <3
Junior TeenHelper
**** 
Name: Sora
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Posts: 274
Join Date: February 3rd 2011
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 7th 2011, 04:18 AM
These kind of remind me of haikus, except they arent xD
i like it though Just rise above this
Kill them with your kindness Ignorance is blindness They're the ones that stand to lose 'Cause they don't even know you All they see is SCARS They don't see the ANGEL Living in your heart |
|
|
|
|
(#3 (permalink))
|
|
I am your density.
Outside, huh? **********
Name: Chessica.
Location: Underneath a southern sky.
Posts: 4,025
Join Date: September 20th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 8th 2011, 01:51 AM
Quote:
Thanks. 
Nothing in the world is the way it ought to be. It's harsh, and cruel. But that's why there's us - champions. Doesn't matter where we come from, what we've done or suffered, or even if we make a difference. We live as though the world is as it should be, to show it what it can be. |
|
|
|
|
|
(#4 (permalink))
|
|
Love Is The Movement
I've been here a while
******** 
Name: Nicole
Gender: Female
Location: USA
Posts: 1,255
Join Date: January 29th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 8th 2011, 08:17 PM
Chess, I like this. Poetry can be good without rhyming and having a certain rythem.
"Shoot for the moon, even if you miss you'll land among the stars."
"For those who don't care, for those who can't see, never give up, always thrive to be free." Smile, you are beautiful www.operationbeautiful.com Blessed Be! Nicole AKA Nikki Artist, Poet, and Future Social Worker  |
|
|
|
|
(#5 (permalink))
|
|
I like tea. <3
 I can't get enough ********* 
Name: Hester
Age: 17
Gender: Gender Fluid
Location: England
Posts: 2,453
Join Date: April 18th 2011
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 9th 2011, 12:33 PM
The imagery in this is amazing. It's a really well written, wonderful poem. Not all poems need rhyme schemes and whatnot.
Thanks for sharing this. Buddy June 24th 2011-August 10th 2011 Live Help Operator since July 28th 2011 HelpLINK Mentor since August 10th 2011. Addictive Behaviours Forum Moderator since September 8th 2011. General Forum Moderator since January 29th 2012. Social Networking Team since January 15th 2012.  |
 |
|
|
(#6 (permalink))
|
|
I am your density.
Outside, huh? **********
Name: Chessica.
Location: Underneath a southern sky.
Posts: 4,025
Join Date: September 20th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 10th 2011, 01:14 AM
Thank you both.
Nothing in the world is the way it ought to be. It's harsh, and cruel. But that's why there's us - champions. Doesn't matter where we come from, what we've done or suffered, or even if we make a difference. We live as though the world is as it should be, to show it what it can be. |
|
|
|
|
(#8 (permalink))
|
|
I am your density.
Outside, huh? **********
Name: Chessica.
Location: Underneath a southern sky.
Posts: 4,025
Join Date: September 20th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 12th 2011, 12:13 AM
Thanks Nika.
Nothing in the world is the way it ought to be. It's harsh, and cruel. But that's why there's us - champions. Doesn't matter where we come from, what we've done or suffered, or even if we make a difference. We live as though the world is as it should be, to show it what it can be. |
|
|
|
|
(#9 (permalink))
|
|
A puzzle in the making
Regular TeenHelper
***** 
Name: Kristen
Gender: Female
Location: United States
Posts: 366
Join Date: November 3rd 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 13th 2011, 07:37 PM
This is beautiful! It definitely speaks to me as I do that sometimes myself. Haha.
Anyway, great job. Lovely! ♥ I guess we are who we are for a lot of reasons. And maybe we’ll never know most of them. But even if we don’t have the power to choose where we come from, we can still choose where we go from there. We can still do things. And we can try to feel okay about them. PM|VM|EMAIL 2.24.11 & forever Buddy: 7.22.11 |
|
|
|
|
(#10 (permalink))
|
|
Why so Serious?
I've been here a while
******** 
Name: Jess
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Location: Canada
Posts: 1,085
Join Date: June 25th 2010
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 13th 2011, 07:48 PM
this is very good, there is actually rhyming in it just not a rhyme scheme :P and also a poem doesnt have to rhyme to be poetry there are SO many literary/poetic devices like alliteration which you used well or euphony which you also used quite well. lol well there my mad poet speech...but ANYWAY great poem, its powerful to me, i like it
 The world ain't all sunshine and rainbows. It is a very mean and nasty place and it will beat you to your knees and keep you there permanently if you let it. You, me, or nobody is gonna hit as hard as life. But it ain't how hard you hit; it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward. How much you can take, and keep moving forward. PM me if you need to talk about ANYTHING. |
|
|
|
|
(#11 (permalink))
|
|
Live Help Operator
Jeez, get a life! *********** 
Name: Lynds<3
Age: 20
Gender: Alll gurl :)
Location: Seattle.
Posts: 6,217
Join Date: February 19th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 13th 2011, 07:55 PM
Chessssss. You're fantastic. There doesn't have to be rhythm for this to be beautiful. I adore this quite a bit. And I really enjoy the emotion in it. It's wonderful, lovely. Keep posting
 I was looking for a breath of life For a little touch of heavenly light But all the choirs in my head say, no oh oh |
 |
|
|
(#12 (permalink))
|
|
I am your density.
Outside, huh? **********
Name: Chessica.
Location: Underneath a southern sky.
Posts: 4,025
Join Date: September 20th 2009
|
Re: Write my feelings, tear them up. -
July 14th 2011, 06:23 AM
Thank you all. Your comments mean a lot.
Nothing in the world is the way it ought to be. It's harsh, and cruel. But that's why there's us - champions. Doesn't matter where we come from, what we've done or suffered, or even if we make a difference. We live as though the world is as it should be, to show it what it can be. |
|
|
|
|
| Bookmarks |
| Tags |
| feelings, tear, write |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
|
|
