Another poem. :) & Help with titles?

[Intoxicated Brutality]

I'm pretty awful at coming up with titles for pieces I like. Anyone have any tips? What do you guys do to come up with a good title? I've tried drawing one out of the poem before, they just seem kinda dumb to me when I do. xD



Also, another unnamed piece of mine.

"Deflect my empty memories,
Cut straight to the core of me,
You really ought not,
Yet still you try to dissect my thoughts,
Look - there are monsters in my head,
Listen - there are demons lurking under my bed,
I have no hope of escaping them,
Because it's from you they all stem,
Just leave me here with tears pouring down my cheeks,
Fears haven't been this strong in weeks,
Fell down again, nowhere left to go,
Healing had begun once, even if only slow,
Somehow you break through my defenses,
Leave me gasping, breathless,
Only trying to lend a helping hand,
Always doing the best I can,
Nothing is ever good enough for you,
With everything you put me through,
I've decided emotional retraction,
Is easier than facing the reaction,
Can't deal with it, so I'll do what you've never done before,
I'm moving on - I'll become something more."

[Autumnwind]

Originally Posted by Intoxicated Brutality

I'm pretty awful at coming up with titles for pieces I like. Anyone have any tips? What do you guys do to come up with a good title? I've tried drawing one out of the poem before, they just seem kinda dumb to me when I do. xD



Also, another unnamed piece of mine.

"Deflect my empty memories,
Cut straight to the core of me,
You really ought not,
Yet still you try to dissect my thoughts,
Look - there are monsters in my head,
Listen - there are demons lurking under my bed,
I have no hope of escaping them,
Because it's from you they all stem,
Just leave me here with tears pouring down my cheeks,
Fears haven't been this strong in weeks,
Fell down again, nowhere left to go,
Healing had begun once, even if only slow,
Somehow you break through my defenses,
Leave me gasping, breathless,
Only trying to lend a helping hand,
Always doing the best I can,
Nothing is ever good enough for you,
With everything you put me through,
I've decided emotional retraction,
Is easier than facing the reaction,
Can't deal with it, so I'll do what you've never done before,
I'm moving on - I'll become something more."

As I said before. I fucking LOVE this poem. One of my favorites, ever.

This is outstanding. This is my...what? 10th time reading it? I made it a note on facebook that only I can see so I could save it, haha. Fantastic, seriously.

Btw, yes, that is your creeper face.

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Originally Posted by Autumnwind

As I said before. I fucking LOVE this poem. One of my favorites, ever.

This is outstanding. This is my...what? 10th time reading it? I made it a note on facebook that only I can see so I could save it, haha. Fantastic, seriously.

Btw, yes, that is your creeper face.

D'awww hahaha. Thanks, it means a lot. (:

And yes. Yes it is. You like the creeper face. You only act like its weird.

[_sunsets64.]

i LOVE this, especially the last 4 lines, they're simple yet so powerful.
what about something as simple as "Letting Go" for the title? or "Goodbye, Hello"?
sorry, i'm really bad at titles too, feel free to ignore this post haha .

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Originally Posted by _sunsets64.

i LOVE this, especially the last 4 lines, they're simple yet so powerful.
what about something as simple as "Letting Go" for the title? or "Goodbye, Hello"?
sorry, i'm really bad at titles too, feel free to ignore this post haha .

Thanks so much! (:
Those are actually pretty good, thanks!
And haha, you're better than me! Mine are always so awful >< hehe

[Bubbles37]

I'm terrible at titles as well, so I won't try to help there
I just wanted to say that the poem is brilliant!

[Autumnwind]

Originally Posted by Intoxicated Brutality

D'awww hahaha. Thanks, it means a lot. (:

And yes. Yes it is. You like the creeper face. You only act like its weird.

Idk. It fills me up with...warmth. NOT SURE WHY.

It's just...idk....something about the creeper face. IT's awesome.




GO, MY ARMY OF CREEPERS!

[weeping willow]

W-O-W!! that is so amazing! i love it! thanks for sharing
i would suggest maybe "Moving On"? it seems like a key factor in the poem so...

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Originally Posted by Bubbles37

I'm terrible at titles as well, so I won't try to help there
I just wanted to say that the poem is brilliant!

Haha xD at least I'm not alone there then! :P
And thanks!

Originally Posted by Autumnwind

Idk. It fills me up with...warmth. NOT SURE WHY.

It's just...idk....something about the creeper face. IT's awesome.




GO, MY ARMY OF CREEPERS!

With...warmth? xD LOL.
Iknowright?
LOL, that seriously made me bust out lauhing. Just saying. xD

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Originally Posted by weeping willow

W-O-W!! that is so amazing! i love it! thanks for sharing
i would suggest maybe "Moving On"? it seems like a key factor in the poem so...

(: thanks so much!
And another good suggestion c: I appreciate it!

[_sunsets64.]

ooh i like "Moving On"
what about, "Moving on to More" or "On to Something More" ??

[Reverie.]

You have talent! I really love this. It's a really powerful piece of writing.
I'm not too good at names either, but when I write something I get told that if a name isn't obvious to me when I've written it, chose a line you like from the poem itself. IT seems to work pretty well for me!
Nice piece of writing. Well done.

[Intoxicated Brutality]

Originally Posted by _sunsets64.

ooh i like "Moving On"
what about, "Moving on to More" or "On to Something More" ??

Thanks again! (: I think I'm actually going to go with "Something More"

Originally Posted by Ghost.

You have talent! I really love this. It's a really powerful piece of writing.
I'm not too good at names either, but when I write something I get told that if a name isn't obvious to me when I've written it, chose a line you like from the poem itself. IT seems to work pretty well for me!
Nice piece of writing. Well done.

Thanks so much Hollie! (:
That's what I try to do, I just tend to have a hard time finding a king think suits the overall theme xD
(:

[_sunsets64.]

Thanks again! (: I think I'm actually going to go with "Something More"

You're welcome! and I really like that you should try to get this published somewhere, it's really great!