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The Akashic in a Lab Coat
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Name: Luneaoius V Artemis
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First True Poem -
December 16th 2011, 04:15 AM
This is my first actual poem
 . Tell me what you think"The vow that we forgot" I am. Me am I. he who watches. he who resists action. he who is the true evil. He who wields knowledge. He who seeks the great truth. He who will forever stand still. He who will never fight the battle. He who will be watching in the end. He who calls himself the caster of blood. He who is the Akashic, sent to record time. He who knows all but refuses to give wisdom. He is me. This ties into a story i'm going to work on. i'm a carbon based biorganic artificially created automoton; what do you think my balls are made of!?!?
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December 16th 2011, 04:17 AM
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The Akashic in a Lab Coat
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December 16th 2011, 01:36 PM
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i'm a carbon based biorganic artificially created automoton; what do you think my balls are made of!?!?
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December 16th 2011, 04:57 PM
This is actually really good. Normally, I have critique for things, but this is great! There is a ton of emotion in there, and it really tells a lot about who "he" is.
Take care!  I was looking for a breath of life For a little touch of heavenly light But all the choirs in my head say, no oh oh |
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The Akashic in a Lab Coat
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December 17th 2011, 02:48 AM
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i'm a carbon based biorganic artificially created automoton; what do you think my balls are made of!?!?
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December 18th 2011, 06:05 PM
i like this. its pretty good c;
username used to be snowstorm promises mean everything, but once they're broken, sorry means nothing. Ill be fine, I swear..... Im just Gone Beyond Repair -Mayday Parade Repose en Paix, Mrs. Radoye♥ ~April 24, 2012~ |
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