Daughter - Verse / Part 2.

[Autumnwind]

Hello TH, this is the second verse / part of 3 verses / parts. Though, since I have changed the way the song is constructed, I will post the full 2 verses along with the chorus here.

First Verse

You're daddy's little girl, daddys whole entire world

Put on that dress, stand in front of him and give it a twirl

wipe them bubbles off your face and picture the undisturbed

Throw that mirror to the curb, a mixture of who you are and who you were

Daddy tells the teacher all them colors on your face

Are from the lines that you trace when you cover for grace

With your powder but you know it's from the way he escapes

When is mother gonna save? You start wonder in your brain

The angel wont come to stay, but you still get down to pray

Hoping mommy comes down from heaven and takes the suffer away

But when daddy peeks in your room, seeing you're awake

You scramble under the covers with tears rolling down your face

He climbs in bed slowly, whispers "you're going to be okay"

But you know this game, the one he knows you'll play

'Cause if you don't, you can say goodbye to your glowing faith

'Cause he knows that angel in your cross can't close the drapes

Chorus x2

You loath every day hoping the sun goes away

So you can hide in the dark hoping daddy doesn't disgrace

Corrupted embrace served with disgust and distaste

Try to erase the memories of the sick play-dates

Second Verse

The fire burns in your heart for every single fiber hurt

Your whole life withered down to survive the worst

Strive for rebirth but it's hard when he finds that pink skirt

Just try to reverse the scratches on your mind he cursed

Play that violin loud and clear, no one in the clouds can hear

The strain on them chords you've been counting on for years

To allow you to hear the crowd of the proud and the cheer

Please don't allow the tears to crown your fears

But here you are in your closet with eyes closed and doubting ears

waiting for your bottled screams to sink so no one knows how you feel

Amounting to severe clouding of all your ideas

You no longer strum your strings and keep your pounding heart concealed

'Cause no amount of vibrations can allow you to reveal

The level of pain routing to your nerves of steal

So you break your violin into pieces to ground your dreams

'Cause to you a dream is just a dream that none can achieve

I would absolutely love your thoughts on when you found out this was about sexual abuse. And if you think the poem is going in the right direction, how you felt when you ready, and if it flows well. It'l help me improve thank you so much

[Autumnwind]

bumping, I would like some criticism on this and thoughts

[Dez]

I still really love this. I found out it was about sexual abuse around here:
"But when daddy peeks in your room, seeing you're awake

You scramble under the covers with tears rolling down your face

He climbs in bed slowly, whispers "you're going to be okay""

Keep it up, this is amazing!

[Autumnwind]

Originally Posted by Dez

I still really love this. I found out it was about sexual abuse around here:
"But when daddy peeks in your room, seeing you're awake

You scramble under the covers with tears rolling down your face

He climbs in bed slowly, whispers "you're going to be okay""

Keep it up, this is amazing!

Thank you so much

[GoneBeyondRepair]

i agree with Dez
c;
sooo good
i love it x3