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Confused - December 31st 2011, 06:55 AM

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Confused
I lay here shaking on the grass
confused if the horror image is true
It seemed as if it was a dream
But I lay here on the grass as
if it really happened
Dont you wake in a
Horror dream?
Was I really raped
here?
So many questions
so little answers
so lost on what to do
The man was so vivid
I felt as if it was true
I lay here half dressed as I was in my
so called dream.
Maybe it wasnt dream but really happened
My mind is racing
The pain in my heart and body is
REAL
My sea salt water running down my face
I lay here confused of what
happened........


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Re: Confused - December 31st 2011, 02:07 PM

Hey! This was a really strong poem. I'm very sorry that you had to go through that, but writing is a fantastic way to express yourself and I'm glad you're using it to get this off your chest. This poem conveys a lot of emotion.

The only part that that threw me off a little was the use of the word "horror" in describing "image" and "dream." Perhaps "horrific" would fit a little bit better? Or, in place of "horror dream," "nightmare?" But naturally, it's up to you! This poem is very well-written and I know that writers often choose their words to fit a particular image they have in their heads.

Keep writing and keep expressing!
   
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