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The perfect machine - January 26th 2012, 09:06 PM

Perfect machine

Looking around everywhere
Trying to find a way
To change what you’ve become
Adapted to society

All you’ve become
A machine
No personality, no mind of your own
A mindless zombie

Constantly doing what they want you to
Making yourself feel
Like a rebel
Just one thing

One thing you don’t know
This is what they want
Let you think you’re free
Psh you wish everything but that

Your perfect
their perfect machine
Everything they want
No mind, no personality

Self-absorbed
Paying no attention to your surroundings
Filled with greed
Heart of onyx

Ignoring everything around you
“its not my problem”
Let them deal with it
Exactly what they want

Your overloads
Tricking you
Making you into
Their perfect machine

No feelings, no personality
Mind filled with greed
Self-absorbed, Heart of onyx
The Perfect machine



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Re: The perfect machine - January 26th 2012, 10:38 PM

This is beautiful <3
Today's society is filled with "Perfect Machines", But hey, some people are lambs and some people are shepeards, that's just the way it is, no matter how much it should change.


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Re: The perfect machine - January 26th 2012, 10:41 PM

Wow I love it so much! Great job! Kepp up the good work!


I got off track I've made mistakes Back slid my way to that place where souls get lost lines get crossed and the pain won't go away.
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Re: The perfect machine - January 27th 2012, 12:19 AM

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This is beautiful <3
Today's society is filled with "Perfect Machines", But hey, some people are lambs and some people are shepeards, that's just the way it is, no matter how much it should change.
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Wow I love it so much! Great job! Kepp up the good work!
Thank you, and you are correct george that is what this poem was referring to in all reality. This whole world is full of perfect machines, and it is pathetic.



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Re: The perfect machine - January 27th 2012, 12:33 AM

You're welcome!


I got off track I've made mistakes Back slid my way to that place where souls get lost lines get crossed and the pain won't go away.
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Re: The perfect machine - January 27th 2012, 01:40 AM

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Thank you, and you are correct george that is what this poem was referring to in all reality. This whole world is full of perfect machines, and it is pathetic.
It is, I'd love to see more individuality, instead of people who look like someone took a look at them and decided to barbie-ize them.


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Re: The perfect machine - January 29th 2012, 03:32 AM

This is great! Keep writing.


Sing, the last thing on your mind
The last word on your breath
I'll be the one to keep you
I'll keep you at your best



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