Poem: You are

Dreamer · **Poem: You are -** February 8th 2012, 05:03 PM

Hi, I haven't been active here lately, but that might change. This is just a quick poem I wrote. It was quite rushed, but I hope you like it!

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You are the wind in my hair,
and the song in my head.
You are the blessing in my heart,
and the joy in my chest.
You are the butterflies in my stomach,
and tingle in my fingers.
You are the smile on my lips,
and the words of my voice.

You are the dearest person in my life,
the one with the best hugs.
You give me advice like no one else,
and tickle me until I cry.
You fill the void inside of me,
like no one has before.
You make me smile through the pain,
in your own silly ways.
You are wonderfully free,
even though I am stuck in a cage of my own emotions.

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Let me know what you thought!

dantheman1992 · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 8th 2012, 05:51 PM

Love it =-)

Dreamer · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 8th 2012, 06:43 PM

Thanks!

Autumnwind · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 9th 2012, 06:52 AM

Hey Dreamer! this is good, but, never rush your work. I know a lot of times I have a great idea in my head, and I end up rushing to finish so I can get it out to people.

Take your time, 'cause your work will always be better that way. When you rush, a lot of times, it seems like you just put things together (basically, people can tell it's rushed.)

BUT, this piece here didn't seem rushed until after I read that you rushed it.

Great poem though

keep writing!

Dreamer · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 9th 2012, 10:23 AM

Thanks for your input, Robert

I sometimes feel that my poems turn out better when I don't think about them too much, whereas my other work requires more time. I was pleased to hear that you didn't think it felt rushed, though

Thanks again!

Dez · Self Expression Forum Mod 4/23/12

This is really sweet.

Dreamer · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 11th 2012, 11:35 AM

Thanks Dez, I'm glad you liked it!

BruceLeeDemarcus · R.I.P. Tatyana Sawka June 20, 1998- April 9, 2012

it is really amazing! Great job!

Unfortunate · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 13th 2012, 03:27 AM

This is really good! Keep writing. <3

Chris. · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 13th 2012, 03:36 AM

I really like this!

Dreamer · **Re: Poem: You are -** February 13th 2012, 06:53 PM

Wow! Thanks all of you

I'm really glad you liked it!

I'll put a new one up when I get the time!

BruceLeeDemarcus · R.I.P. Tatyana Sawka June 20, 1998- April 9, 2012

Great! I can't wait.

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dantheman1992 Offline Member Welcome me, I'm new! * Name: Danny Age: 19 Gender: Male Location: London Posts: 26 Join Date: February 4th 2012	Re: Poem: You are - February 8th 2012, 05:51 PM Love it =-) JUST RISE ABOVE THIS KILL THEM WITH YOUR KINDNESS IGNORANCE IS BLINDNESS THEY’RE THE ONES THAT STAND TO LOSE CAUSE THEY DON’T EVEN KNOW YOU ALL THEY SEE IS SCARS THEY DON’T SEE THE ANGEL LIVING WITHIN YOU HEART For anyone who needs help or just a chat or what ever PM me any time!

Dreamer Offline Member Regular TeenHelper ***** Age: 18 Gender: Female Location: Sweden Posts: 390 Join Date: February 3rd 2009	Re: Poem: You are - February 8th 2012, 06:43 PM Thanks! If you want to; check out my poems and stuff under the "Self Expression"-forum. You are BEAUTIFUL! <3 Always remember to smile!

Dez Offline I'll be okay... Outside, huh? ********** Name: Desiree or Dez Age: 15 Gender: Female Location: FOR IRAW!!! ...And Connecticut Posts: 3,760 Join Date: November 16th 2010	Re: Poem: You are - February 10th 2012, 10:26 PM This is really sweet. Sing, the last thing on your mind The last word on your breath I'll be the one to keep you I'll keep you at your best Self Expression Forum Mod 4/23/12

Dreamer Offline Member Regular TeenHelper ***** Age: 18 Gender: Female Location: Sweden Posts: 390 Join Date: February 3rd 2009	Re: Poem: You are - February 11th 2012, 11:35 AM Thanks Dez, I'm glad you liked it! If you want to; check out my poems and stuff under the "Self Expression"-forum. You are BEAUTIFUL! <3 Always remember to smile!

BruceLeeDemarcus Offline Member I've been here a while ******** Name: Rachel Age: 15 Gender: Female Location: leaving the stage in the middle of a song (Michigan) Posts: 1,629 Join Date: July 22nd 2011	Re: Poem: You are - February 13th 2012, 12:21 AM it is really amazing! Great job! I got off track I've made mistakes Back slid my way to that place where souls get lost lines get crossed and the pain won't go away. R.I.P. Tatyana Sawka June 20, 1998- April 9, 2012

Unfortunate Offline Used to be bsc98 I've been here a while ******** Name: Dionna Gender: Female Location: Lost in my own world but i live in the US Posts: 1,242 Join Date: March 13th 2011	Re: Poem: You are - February 13th 2012, 03:27 AM This is really good! Keep writing. <3 Stay Strong If you need someone to talk to im always here. PM me any time. <3 Don't stop believin'

Chris. Online Live Help Operator I've been here a while ******** Name: Chris Age: 17 Gender: Male Location: Illinios Posts: 1,863 Join Date: November 28th 2011	Re: Poem: You are - February 13th 2012, 03:36 AM I really like this! Chris Jackson “We cannot change the cards we are dealt, just how we play the hand.”

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