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Searching. - April 17th 2012, 09:12 AM

Just something I wrote a little while ago. Thoughts?

Flashes in the darkness, the corner of my mind;
seems I’m always searching for something I can’t find.
Rain on the horizon; sunsets turning black.
Following the lightning, you’ve wandered off the track.
Snowflakes falling softly, melting on the ground;
maybe what I’m searching for simply can’t be found.


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Re: Searching. - April 17th 2012, 09:22 AM

I think it's beautiful, sad, but beautiful.


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Re: Searching. - April 17th 2012, 10:32 AM

I agree with Cheye. This is so good, Chessmaid. Your poems never cease to amaze me. <3


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Re: Searching. - April 17th 2012, 04:26 PM

This is beautiful, keep on writing chess


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Re: Searching. - April 20th 2012, 04:52 AM

Thanks for the comments, everyone.


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Re: Searching. - April 21st 2012, 05:38 PM

Chess your writing never fails to amaze me. I love it!
I look forward to reading all of your writing.

This is beautiful <3



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Re: Searching. - April 21st 2012, 08:39 PM

It is one of those sad, pretty things that brings tears to your eyes! Your work is so amazing Chinese Checkers! <3


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Re: Searching. - April 22nd 2012, 04:00 AM

I love this! Its really amazing. keep writing! <3


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Re: Searching. - April 22nd 2012, 04:05 AM

It's really well done. I felt connected to it as well, so it made it special for me to read
   
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Re: Searching. - April 23rd 2012, 12:57 PM

Wow, how did I not notice more people had replied to this?
Thank you all for your comments. I really appreciate them.


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Re: Searching. - April 23rd 2012, 03:31 PM

I really like this. I do a little poetry too, but I'm not too good at it. But you're really good. Keep writing, this is awesome!


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Re: Searching. - April 23rd 2012, 03:43 PM

I'm a little late but who cares. I really like this. It's beautiful.
   
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Re: Searching. - April 23rd 2012, 05:50 PM

i absuletly love this poem xx
   
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Re: Searching. - April 25th 2012, 04:45 AM

Thanks, guys. I love the positive feedback.


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Re: Searching. - April 26th 2012, 12:28 PM

This piece totally and utterly blew me away. I love the rhythmical structure, which I think adds to the impact of the last line. You write beautifully, Chess.
   
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Re: Searching. - April 27th 2012, 12:24 AM

Your writing is fantastic. I love the strength of the feelings I got from this. The imagery of nature is stunningly, brilliantly woven between psychological wonderings which combine with it to create a more symbolic, profound, and complete idea. The harmony of the sentences resonates with a beautiful melody - the whole piece is beautiful, and somewhat sorrowful. Excellently written, Chess.

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Re: Searching. - April 27th 2012, 10:35 AM

Thank you! You guys are way too sweet. I don't think I've ever received such lovely compliments on my writing.


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Re: Searching. - April 27th 2012, 07:52 PM

i love it thanks for sharing


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