Let's take a looksie:
Overall, I get the impression that someone has a decent ability to write, has read the book, understood it and gathered some good information but that's about it. I don't get the sense that the person is pursuing an argument because you define a decent argument in the intro but you don't follow it and at the end, the argument has miraculously changed. An essay is meant to not only have a good amount of information but the information is meant to be organized, coherent and there's meant to be some argument that you're trying to convince to me.
Ohhh, this was something I was quoting to respond to a post... ha. I am on
TH way too much
