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The Rose And the Lily (Poem) - July 17th 2012, 04:51 AM
Hey guys, here's a sonnet I just finished writing about 10 minutes ago at work. The pattern is ABAA, obviously. And for anyone who doesn't know, a sonnet is a poem with 3 quatrains, and a couplet. I appreciate criticism, so criticize away please.

I walked along a country road
With a wind that kissed my face;
And there in place stood a lovely rose
Whose form looked like a model's pose.
This rose's beauty caught my stare;
I smiled and she smiled back,
Then crossed the plain to over where
She stood with flowing crimson hair.
She looked at me with sorry eyes
And said we'd never be,
So I took her hands and with a sigh
I kissed her vines and said goodbye.
It's all my fault, I was being silly,
A rose would never love a lily.