another cheesy poem -_-

[cherrypie36]

Ripped and torn, into shattered bits
I find your arm with open slits
your mind is stuck, your brain is dead
Written on paper but nothing said

but The stage is yours, for all to see
show them, show them who you can really be
do not be blinded by shining light
because what is wrong is always right

so Step over your limit, Step over the line
take what was never yours but always mine
criticize what was always good
and praise yourself for what you could

Let your words always be true
and allow your emotions to come right through
feel the ringing in your ears
and Know what is minutes, may be years

but here and behold, it's finally done
You didn't cry, you didn't run
it's over and now you can finally see
this is you, this who your meant to be


- by Meris

a lame ass free writer.
I hate this poem but oh fucking well,

[Ennui.]

I personally think it's good.

[cherrypie36]

i hate it ..ugh

[Ennui.]

I think everyone is a bit more critical of their own work than the work of others.

[Twinge]

Yeah, everyone is critical when it comes to their work because they know all of the places where things COULD be worded better.

I personally think it's not bad at all, maybe needs some accenting. But I guess it's in the style.

[cherrypie36]

now, i want to delete it

[coolkid98]

I also think its really good, I hope you carry on writing poems.

[cherrypie36]

thanks, i'll try to