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Thin ice - September 20th 2018, 12:22 AM

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I've been struggling to write anything. I have a few more ideas so I hope I can draw them out soon.

Your selfish heart is colder than a frozen lake
it's so cold that the middle split right in two
There is only so much manipulation I can take
and the drop in temperature started with you
The degrees dipped down lower than my sanity
though your ego somehow remained intact
Parenting was served with a side of vanity
no one ever saw through your act. In fact,
everyone was in complete awe of the show
They think I am lucky to call you my parent
I smile and nod even though I have to know
about the cold that isn't always so apparent
I let people think that you're just the best
that you're sugary sweet and everything nice
Little do they know that you put me to rest
my inner child's soul lies under that ice
Take each of your steps slowly now, my dear
you really don't want that thin ice to crack
Because once you're put to rest down here
you don't have a chance of coming back


If clarity's in death, then why won't this die?
Years of tearing down our banners, you and I
Living for the thrill of hitting you where it hurts
Give me back my girlhood, it was mine first


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Re: Thin ice - September 20th 2018, 11:04 AM

I loved this. It was really well written and I loved how descriptive it was. I hope you are doing okay.
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Re: Thin ice - September 20th 2018, 12:09 PM

Very powerful. Thank you for sharing! <3


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Re: Thin ice - September 20th 2018, 03:13 PM

I agree that this is definitely a powerful poem. I love the descriptions as well.


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Re: Thin ice - September 22nd 2018, 11:09 AM

I'm always so in awe of the way you write. You have such a way with words, it just floors me every time you post a new piece.


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Re: Thin ice - September 22nd 2018, 04:45 PM

This was wonderful. Hugs


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Re: Thin ice - September 23rd 2018, 08:49 PM

I love this! Especially the last few lines!



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Re: Thin ice - October 2nd 2018, 08:10 PM

Quote:
Little do they know that you put me to rest
my inner child's soul lies under that ice
There's something about this that just stands out to me, I love this.


Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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