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The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 02:23 PM

The city's eyes are blurred tonight
Twixt rain and tears trapped in my sight.
I know not why the city cries
And shares with me her frigid sighs.
Perhaps like me she squalls in pain,
In search of what she can't explain,
And finds a refuge in her tears
Held back in pain for all the years
When every fight, and every crime,
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 06:17 PM

I like how you compared yourself to the city, that was good. It was short but got the point across, good work! continue writing



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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 07:45 PM

That is really good! I love it
   
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 24th 2012, 03:27 AM

like Ash said, i liked the comparison. i also like the personification of the city, which again ties to yourself. and your word choice. very nice


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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 24th 2012, 06:06 AM

Wow, this one is really great! I agree with what everyone is saying fully.


   
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 26th 2012, 09:44 AM

I also really like the comparison you have used. It's a great poem!
   
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 26th 2012, 04:07 PM

I thought this was very beautifully written.


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