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The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 01:23 PM
The city's eyes are blurred tonight
Twixt rain and tears trapped in my sight.
I know not why the city cries
And shares with me her frigid sighs.
Perhaps like me she squalls in pain,
In search of what she can't explain,
And finds a refuge in her tears
Held back in pain for all the years
When every fight, and every crime,
Built up inside her every time.
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 05:17 PM
I like how you compared yourself to the city, that was good. It was short but got the point across, good work! continue writing


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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 19th 2012, 06:45 PM
That is really good! I love it
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 24th 2012, 02:27 AM
like Ash said, i liked the comparison. i also like the personification of the city, which again ties to yourself. and your word choice. very nice

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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 24th 2012, 05:06 AM
Wow, this one is really great! I agree with what everyone is saying fully.

Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 26th 2012, 08:44 AM
I also really like the comparison you have used. It's a great poem!
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Re: The City's Eyes (Poem) - June 26th 2012, 03:07 PM
I thought this was very beautifully written.
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